.:.: Straight Rippin :.:.

[Arvincible]

cash the mic....check..


I AM....the best n the truest-u-see, cuz my flow influencing-thee,
Flesh.. aint another as fluid-as-he, the liquid flows oh so lucratively
And he's someone you-couldn't-be, leave ya whole crew-in-defeat
its why he gotta be the cruelest-emcee, to drop heat n ruin-the-beats
And come through-with-the-heat, on a drop top cruisin-the-streets

To me, sayin-some-words is like sprayin-the-third, slayin-you-birds,
Aint nobody see you 'messin with shit' unless you playin-with-turd
Pronunciation-disturbed to make it prove a demonstration-to-herbs...
Continuation-my-verbs is like an allegorical representation-ya-heard?
So try to understand-the-definition, niggas cant stand-the-demolition
I mean someone's gotta do it and I'm the man to handle-the-position...
Its amber-that-im-dishin, u cudnt bring fire with a candle-in-the-kitchen,
Like tryin to command-a-politician, i leave no chance-for-the-opposition
Tryna be the illest like cancer-is-the-mission, n so i answer-indecisions
So high its like im dancin-wit-the-pigeons, ill slice ya mask-into-divisions
Poor fuck, u cant afford a check so im sendin pampers-to-ya-children!
Got u niggas screamin "oh my God!" like im the fuckin answer-to-religion..

its like a curse-laid to burst-flames, first to have ya hearse-made
ill fuck u over more than the Vietnamese havin the "shirts-made"
cuz the fo-fifth got u "dodgin the block" more than a "reverse-lay"
i dont spit it or talk it bitch i squirt-game, so when the verse-made,
i already got the broad on her knees like she ready to "church-pray"
so im leavin her skirt-slain, and likely to give you a red shirt-stain
if u talk bout "ill" then im the worst-case, ill have the third-blaze
killin roaches like i dispersed-raid while u screamin "it hurts-mayne"
FLESH WOUND...the real reason paramedics is grabbin the first-aid...

[Kurse]

Very raw-ass drop Arv...shit was dat cracc no doubt! Also good wordplay on your new text-name in the ending bar.
Excellent vocab used, nuthin too complex but very far from simple, struture was very on point. Fav bars would have to be...

"To me, sayin-some-words is like sprayin-the-third, slayin-you-birds,
Aint nobody see you 'messin with shit' unless you playin-with-turd
Pronunciation-disturbed to make it prove a demonstration-to-herbs...
Continuation-my-verbs is like an allegorical representation-ya-heard?
So try to understand-the-definition, niggas cant stand-the-demolition
I mean someone's gotta do it and I'm the man to handle-the-position...
Its amber-that-im-dishin, u cudnt bring fire with a candle-in-the-kitchen,
Like tryin to command-a-politician, i leave no chance-for-the-opposition"

Opened the verse pretty decent as well...I'ma give this drop a 9.5/10 for you. The concept has been done before, which is what stops me from giving you a 10...but it was well written and versed. Nice shit pimpin.

[Def-init]

Yo....
"its like a curse-laid to burst-flames, first to have ya hearse-made
ill fuck u over more than the Vietnamese havin the "shirts-made"
cuz the fo-fifth got u "dodgin the block" more than a "reverse-lay"
i dont spit it or talk it bitch i squirt-game, so when the verse-made,
i already got the broad on her knees like she ready to "church-pray"
so im leavin her skirt-slain, and likely to give you a red shirt-stain
if u talk bout "ill" then im the worst-case, ill have the third-blaze
killin roaches like i dispersed-raid while u screamin "it hurts-mayne"
FLESH WOUND...the real reason paramedics is grabbin the first-aid..."

Gotta give credit where credit is due...That was ill man.

[Ambiguous Realm]

nice, i like the punches to it, the new name's a bit iffy but i like it better than ur other haha, whichever works for u i guess, overall i liked this drop, the flow was nice, the multis were nice, a good solid drop

9/10

[MagicMark]

cant hate - nice verse...

good multis.. decent punches.. solid lines.. the odd place they felt a little off.. but the piece as a whole was very good..

overall id give it an 7.5 - 8 / 10

sometimes the way things where worded made it a little awkward.. but no doubt this hot.. keep doing man..

also whats with the name change lol... ?

[Arvincible]

thanks for the feed mah niggas

uppin

[Haz]

We Don't Meet Eye to Eye. But fuck Bein Completely Sour.. Ain with It..

I AM....the best n the truest-u-see, cuz my flow influencing-thee,
Flesh.. aint another as fluid-as-he, the liquid flows oh so lucratively
And he's someone you-couldn't-be, leave ya whole crew-in-defeat
its why he gotta be the cruelest-emcee, to drop heat n ruin-the-beats
And come through-with-the-heat, on a drop top cruisin-the-streets


Some of Ya Multi's ain Connect Right in This lil Piece.
But overrall you Maintained a Straight Flow & Kept good Multis
No Punches , but It Was Good for a Lil Intro..


To me, sayin-some-words is like sprayin-the-third, slayin-you-birds,
Aint nobody see you 'messin with shit' unless you playin-with-turd
Pronunciation-disturbed to make it prove a demonstration-to-herbs...
Continuation-my-verbs is like an allegorical representation-ya-heard?
So try to understand-the-definition, niggas cant stand-the-demolition
I mean someone's gotta do it and I'm the man to handle-the-position...
Its amber-that-im-dishin, u cudnt bring fire with a candle-in-the-kitchen,
Like tryin to command-a-politician, i leave no chance-for-the-opposition
Tryna be the illest like cancer-is-the-mission, n so i answer-indecisions
So high its like im dancin-wit-the-pigeons, ill slice ya mask-into-divisions
Poor fuck, u cant afford a check so im sendin pampers-to-ya-children!
Got u niggas screamin "oh my God!" like im the fuckin answer-to-religion..


The Messin With Shit Line didn't Connect righ , it's SLightly Played
And The Play ain Come in Full Contact.

Pronunciation-disturbed to make it prove a demonstration-to-herbs...
Continuation-my-verbs is like an allegorical representation-ya-heard?
^ i Was Feelin That Bar, Good Choice of Voice. Tied Multi's Togetha Good.
Closer Straight


I mean someone's gotta do it and I'm the man to handle-the-position...
Its amber-that-im-dishin, u cudnt bring fire with a candle-in-the-kitchen,
Amber that im Dishin part Was Koo.. But Arv Chill With Da Candle Line..
It's a NO NO... This was Solid Don't Take away From it.


Like tryin to command-a-politician, i leave no chance-for-the-opposition
Tryna be the illest like cancer-is-the-mission, n so i answer-indecisions

Firs Line u Got Off Nice... Cancer Part Was a Lil Played a Lil but ain Take Away From da bar.. Closed Wid a koo Multi..


So high its like im dancin-wit-the-pigeons, ill slice ya mask-into-divisions
Poor fuck, u cant afford a check so im sendin pampers-to-ya-children!
Got u niggas screamin "oh my God!" like im the fuckin answer-to-religion..

High Pigeons < No.. It's Straight Though.. Lol Mask Into Divisions.. Straight
a Touch of Humor in Da Second Line , jus Seemed like a Subliminal..
Third Line U Did good... Seen A Few Bar's like Dat Before.. But u Worded it Right To Make it Yours..


its like a curse-laid to burst-flames, first to have ya hearse-made
ill fuck u over more than the Vietnamese havin the "shirts-made"
cuz the fo-fifth got u "dodgin the block" more than a "reverse-lay"
i dont spit it or talk it bitch i squirt-game, so when the verse-made,
i already got the broad on her knees like she ready to "church-pray"
so im leavin her skirt-slain, and likely to give you a red shirt-stain
if u talk bout "ill" then im the worst-case, ill have the third-blaze
killin roaches like i dispersed-raid while u screamin "it hurts-mayne"
FLESH WOUND...the real reason paramedics is grabbin the first-aid...

^ Didn't Really See Hard Punches in Dis Segment.. i Think U Did Best Ya third Verse... As a Closer This was Straight Multi's Was Here...Wasn't Feel The Set Up's... BUT!... You Outshined This Whole Segment With The Last Line fa Sure..
Remind's Me of Some Word Play i'd Pull out When i Was spittin On illest Like Crazy...

Anyways Dis Wasn't No Hate Feed So don't get All Bitchy...

Dis Was a Solid Drop...Multi's Was Deffoo On Point Cept One or 2 Bars in Da Begginin i Think it Was.. Punche's Were More Towards The Middle.. The Middle Had More Substance Then Any Otha Segment... The Last Line was a Good Way To Execute The Drop.. Can't Say To Much More.. Jus Stay Away From Da Flesh Play's Now.. Cause U Used it Good in Dis Drop Don't wanna Lower Da Standards..Think i Seen a Few Subliminals Let Me Know if any Was 2 Me.. i'll Fire righ Back...

Anyways Straight Piece.. Keep Doin You...Don't Be to Big Headed Now.. lol

[Arvincible]

nah none aimed at anyone, this piece was originally two seperate
ones, but yeah thanks for the detailed breakdown.

i havent written a scripture for weeks man, i know i need to get better at it.


uppin

[Borat]

you have Ill multies, I like the mean style too, alot of bad ass puns and word-play used, overall it was a solid drop. keep writing for sure man haha. some dope punchlines too.

[$incEar]

its straighte homie..not too bad I'd give it a 4/10 ..You have a Potentially Good Flow just work on your vocab & Wordplay ..it comes in time just keep doin you..pz

[Arvincible]

uppin

[Mass Effex]

killin roaches like i dispersed-raid while u screamin "it hurts-mayne"
FLESH WOUND...the real reason paramedics is grabbin the first-aid...

^that was a damn good ending

[Arvincible]

thanks uppin one last time

[HKX]

damn nigga raw ass drop gotta agree wit da rest of em dat left u feed everythin was on point 4rm wat i read, u should invest in gettin sum studio equipment i like ur writtens but i would like 2 see how u do on da mic a good writer always has an advantage when blazin da mic and ur word play is smooth 2 i'm tellin u nigga you'll make sum classic shit wit it jus ride da beat and ur straight nigga been tellin u dis since i read ur 1st drop son lol props like da intro like dat answer 2 religion line haha wasn't disappointed in dis drop

[HKX]

FAV LINES HIGHLIGHTED IN DIFFERENT COLORS ALMOST 4GOT I GIVE UR PIECE A 10/10

COLORS R BLUE, GREEN, AND RED

I AM....the best n the truest-u-see, cuz my flow influencing-thee,
Flesh.. aint another as fluid-as-he, the liquid flows oh so lucratively
And he's someone you-couldn't-be, leave ya whole crew-in-defeat
its why he gotta be the cruelest-emcee, to drop heat n ruin-the-beats
And come through-with-the-heat, on a drop top cruisin-the-streets

To me, sayin-some-words is like sprayin-the-third, slayin-you-birds,
Aint nobody see you 'messin with shit' unless you playin-with-turd
Pronunciation-disturbed to make it prove a demonstration-to-herbs...
Continuation-my-verbs is like an allegorical representation-ya-heard?
So try to understand-the-definition, niggas cant stand-the-demolition
I mean someone's gotta do it and I'm the man to handle-the-position...
Its amber-that-im-dishin, u cudnt bring fire with a candle-in-the-kitchen,
Like tryin to command-a-politician, i leave no chance-for-the-opposition
Tryna be the illest like cancer-is-the-mission, n so i answer-indecisions
So high its like im dancin-wit-the-pigeons, ill slice ya mask-into-divisions
Poor fuck, u cant afford a check so im sendin pampers-to-ya-children!
Got u niggas screamin "oh my God!" like im the fuckin answer-to-religion..

its like a curse-laid to burst-flames, first to have ya hearse-made
ill fuck u over more than the Vietnamese havin the "shirts-made"
cuz the fo-fifth got u "dodgin the block" more than a "reverse-lay"
i dont spit it or talk it bitch i squirt-game, so when the verse-made,
i already got the broad on her knees like she ready to "church-pray"
so im leavin her skirt-slain, and likely to give you a red shirt-stain
if u talk bout "ill" then im the worst-case, ill have the third-blaze
killin roaches like i dispersed-raid while u screamin "it hurts-mayne"
FLESH WOUND...the real reason paramedics is grabbin the first-aid...