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So Much Bullshit (Fuck Ya)

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On a fuck the world rant here lol. feed will be returned




Gung ho forces coming straight from the bible belt, to Bagdad to provide the help
Chasing Arab oil, n Hussein rifle melts, plunder their gold like their Michael Phelps
Under false pretences, must be how disciples felt, playin to those who incite the hell
Democracy wont work, but we might as well, provide a climate where Nike can sell
It's dog eat dog, cannibal ways, but ma government n cousins Uncle Sam are so paid
Life is chasing a wage, I feel shackled, a slave, like Guantanamo Bay where the animals stay
And fuck the media, we hang on every word that these articles say, I say fuck that
They wanted war, now they ask why our soldiers particles sprayed on a dirt track
Hypocrites tryna scare us,
Consumer confidence in question, not long n its recession, its no good their tryna scythe us
Tellin us theres no future we`re all lifers, got house prices droppin like Mutual in the cyphers
Police are just as bad, them hoes do badly, why's it up to me to get them foes who stabbed me,
Bastards!…got those 2 gladly, real shit, I could give a fuck bout whos tryna dis-pose Mugabe
We got problems closer to home, who want a random war over human rights issues?
When someone's sons in a box who provides tissues?….
In my hood were stressed with no laurels, programmed to digest all our morals
Were constantly beefin, building nests out of quarrels, til we`re at rest with the corals
N forum reps are so hollow, after respect, anyone believe illests fake thugs are a threat?
Assholes! talkin flesh n blood on the net, fuck a ban shoulda left his flesh n blood on his steps
Dudes gotta realise, be a jerk n it costs ya, fuck these net Rambos, their surfin imposters
Their bullshit aint lost ya? they go from murkin a roster to tryna flirt with their posture
Just a bitch in disguise, hear a slam then I off ya, predicte ya demise, I fuckin damn ya like Nostra......FUCK YA
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Post by ÐÛÇ£» »

Opening Bar Was Just A Killer G...Flow Was A Little Distorted In Some Places But It's All Good Fam... You Brought It Back Up With Ya Multi's And Rhyme Scheme...All And Out.. I Give This Piece A 7.5
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Post by HKX »

7.5/10 my nigga i like da opener on dis scrip da whole thing was dope my fav line was dis one tho nigga shit is true lol

Life is chasing a wage, I feel shackled, a slave, like Guantanamo Bay where the animals stay
And fuck the media, we hang on every word that these articles say
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yep thanks for the feed. and HKX id return the feed but none of the audios are workin on my shitty compuer right now lol.
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Post by Arvincible »

Good job cee, I read this yesterday but didn't have the time to leave feed..

The opener was sick, flow is decent, just changes through out the piece probably because of the topics u mentioned had diff tones... anyways, ur getting really good at this kind of concept man, ur really hitting these types of points hard.. Ur michael phelps bar was really smart imo.

Good stuff man 8.4/10 this concept is really hard to attempt for me. Keep it up dude
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Post by - Mutual - »

it was pretty good

openin line was good it flowed well nice concept to the whole piece sum not bad multies sum were good hope ya keep'em comin this concept is pretty good keep doin ya thing
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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Post by Gutta »

Bra that first line was ill! i liked the whole piece it was consistent...good read. keep it up patna
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Post by |.R.SON.aLL.| »

Cee, I Must admit That Opener Was Way Crazy ..
I Felt That With an Opener Like That, You Didn't Really Have Nothin Else in Tha Verse On That Level ..
I Thought a Few Lines Were Koo, Concept Was Good ..
But That Opener Was Killer, Too Much For Tha Rest Of Tha Verse Lol ..
Props Tho Cee
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