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Post by Brah-Vo »

Ya'll dudes take 5
Let raiza sharp relieve the stress for a minute.

Stuck in despair
so i scratch up the coffin
Like Lupe wanna catch him he ballin
Like yao ming im matchin up Tallin
Expellin gas sellin like a flatulent walkin

Tryna sound complex
Head of illest

come on plex!

Givin great emcees the chance to let them see
Charge em overpriced coz of the overhyped concert fee entry
Linin up overnight like a simpsons overbite
You yellow alright, yellow all over
Like an asians skin colour
shot clocks run out so pass the ball over


Pass the ball over !


Or keep it airtight

Cut em together when somethin good goin down i also tape fights
iight,
im More serious then a heart attack caused by snake bites
Like a naggin wife, except snake bites rarely eva attack twice (haha)

Point me in the direction where the good be
Or in the opposite direction of where the hood be
They say i have CDO, which is OCD
But CDO is alphabetical, they way it should be
so in reality it could be that my rhyme scheme could be credible

Like that .

So to all you whack multi syllable obsessed emcees
why arent your girlfriends callin you?
It's probably coz they got more balls then you.

Peace :D
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Post by - Mutual - »

shit i liked the humour
it rhymed pretty well
a bit crazy in places well the whole thing was crazy
it had sum good rhymes sum where u fell off abit
but if this is men't for audio it could be cgood
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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Post by complexity »

What the hell is this? lol
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I take it that its bad?
Good Lookn on the feed MH.
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btw i wrote it to the "Dirty Harry" instrumental by the gorillaz.
Yo and dont feel bad dudes. If u think one of my pieces whack just tell me strait.
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Post by Dynamiq »

umm i felt this was pretty dull in my eyes i meen..the skill wasnt even there..its like you just started writing or something..but it all comes with time and practice..you have potential keep scribing.
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Post by HKX »

Cut em together when somethin good goin down i also tape fights
iight,
im More serious then a heart attack caused by snake bites
Like a naggin wife, except snake bites rarely eva attack twice (haha)

dat line was my fav one on dis shit it stood out 2 me nice drop nigga it was decent 7/10
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Post by Cee4 »

lol man i been smokin tonight but this dont make any sense to me. i like the snake bite/naggin wife line but i think your tryin to hard to think "outside the box" and it dosent reaaly make any sense as far as i can see.
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Post by Arvincible »

Lol nice try... but ur attacking creativity over concept...that won't do.
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Gah. Fuck.
GOod Lookz on the feed .
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