When The Sun Goes Down

-TraMaTiK- · Post by **-TraMaTiK-** » Sat Jul 05, 2008 8:51 am

http://soundclick.com/share?songid=6690604

got the lyrics there too as always..leave ur thoughts i help do the chorus and i do the 2nd verse

Kurse · Post by **Kurse** » Sat Jul 05, 2008 4:13 pm

Hook was decent...wasn't too thrilled on the double-up of both ur voices on the hook because the two of you have completely different tones in ur voices, so it almost takes away from the impact that the hook could have. Lyrically, the hook isn't bad. I'd give it a 7.5/10!

As for ur verse, your structure has improved a little bit. You still do real emotional tracks, like you always do. To be honest, I'd love to see what else you can do. Go beyond your norm and try sumthin different...sumthin out of your element. Your flow was better than normal on here...so u can see the personal improvement, but there's still improvements that can be made. Lyrically it stands up to the same level as your others...I'd have to give it 7/10 for the track as a whole. I don't think that it's a matter of you not finding your emotions while doin a track...I just think you're a real soft-spoken when it comes to your mic presence! Get excited mayne!!!

Stratosphere · Post by **Stratosphere** » Mon Aug 18, 2008 1:28 am

That was Gut-Wrenching and just plain BAD !!!! What the hell is wrong with our youth today ? You've been influenced by todays rapper and you need to look back to yesterdays emcees - ie. Canibus , Journalist , Juice , GZA -------------grade:D-

Omega Bill · Post by **Omega Bill** » Mon Aug 18, 2008 5:32 am

^^Get off your fucking high horse, kid. Quit talking about the "youth" of today when you're probably some 2-bit teenager with bad acne.

Kurse · Post by **Kurse** » Mon Aug 18, 2008 6:46 am

Stratosphere wrote:That was Gut-Wrenching and just plain BAD !!!! What the hell is wrong with our youth today ? You've been influenced by todays rapper and you need to look back to yesterdays emcees - ie. Canibus , Journalist , Juice , GZA -------------grade:D-

Suck a cock and tell your mother to enjoy sum too! ^^^

I got plenty in my Sean Johns if you're lookin for any you cock-bag.

-MiiLz. · Post by **-MiiLz.** » Wed Aug 20, 2008 11:17 pm

Hey U Got Better At Ya Flowin On The Track & Shit
Still Needs Some Improvement But Nice Track.
U Should Practice Freestylin More To The Track
To Up Ya Flow Though ..But U Defiantly Got Better
And Hey Remember Man SEND ME YO VOCALS FIRST
i Can Get U The Best Quality U Ever Had ..

Peace

HKX · Post by **HKX** » Thu Aug 21, 2008 12:47 pm

yo dis track was dope 1st verse was koo, ur verse was de-so as well da hook could've been more uhh how could i word dis u could've showed more dramatic shit on da hook and u need 2 get more on da mic got all out nigga like u finna die or sumthin like dat shit was decent tho keep droppin nigga 1.

Brah-Vo · Post by **Brah-Vo** » Thu Aug 21, 2008 8:36 pm

I enjoyed. Nothing new to add. Seeing as i aint as informed as the others. I thought it was pretty dope and im diggin what u bringin to the emotional game. One of the few emcees who still do that AND can pull it off.

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