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[font=Comic Sans MS] roll out the red carpet, yalls mics are molded quite garbage
ima dawg starvin, did'nt fret just step'd n left a bloody red harness
Im ugly boys and girls, wit crooked theeth like jigga
put out an album that seen more wood than a riva
reasonable dought? naw Im just stress'd by seasonal drought
bitch you cant hear me? well start pullin them pennises out
first verse left u gasping, implified ur more fake than a drag queen
well thats what you turn to if you attemped to impersionate as me
nasty!

Im, in and out of a bitch like the use of acid
Im, In and outta fits like a beauty pangent
to much skill for your minds to grasp it
and life just so has it, line for line Im no mime faggots


dammit, i run threw bars leaving echos like when horses gallups
writters block is bad luck (lol) and i just begun to open the Can-of (whoop ass BOI!)
your metaphors are so cliche, your morce codes average
Im the king, there will be no revenge so bye bye hamlets
Im quick to leave your rythms on the floor like army pamphlet
im swift to kick your chest broken and leave torso's ravaged

Im, in and out of a bitch like the use of acid
Im, In and outta fits like a beauty pangent
to much skill for your minds to grasp it
and life just so has it, line for line Im no mime faggots
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[font=Comic Sans MS] so how do you describe a boy with no more teeth?
the soldier who ran from war with his tail between
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Son, You Seriously Needa Step ya Spits Up in Every Area Possible ..
This is Okay, But C`mon Third Graders Can Rhyme Better ..
A lot More Creative Too ..(Kids are Way More Creative Than Adults FYI) ..
But Umm Yeah This Drop Wasn't Hot at all ..
Step Up!
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bitch
[font=Comic Sans MS] so how do you describe a boy with no more teeth?
the soldier who ran from war with his tail between
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Post by Omega Bill »

Nah man. This is not hate to you in any way but you really got to elevate.

Im ugly boys and girls, wit crooked theeth like jigga
put out an album that seen more wood than a riva
reasonable dought? naw Im just stress'd by seasonal drought
bitch you cant hear me? well start pullin them pennises out

That's such a simplistic rhyme scheme it's not even funny. Rhyming one syllable doesn't make you good. Riva and Jigga? Seriously?

dammit, i run threw bars leaving echos like when horses gallups
writters block is bad luck (lol) and i just begun to open the Can-of

Forced rhyme that doesn't even rhyme.

Im quick to leave your rythms on the floor like army pamphlet
im swift to kick your chest broken and leave torso's ravaged

Yet another forced rhyme. Pamphlet and Ravaged?

Step your game up, man. You can't be talkin' all that shit you talk and say you're better than everyone when you're forcing rhymes left and right and none of your "rhymes" even rhyme, and when they do it's wayyyyy too simplistic.
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