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Watcha Back (Here I Come)

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just a lil quicky
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Ayo, my pen is rushin' down the paper like lightnin'/
And thunder, i'll make you like The Rescuers...down under//
Some say this i'm serious, haters say its mockery/
but i'm cuttin' off their words, like i was spittin' apostrophes//
Imma lyrical pitbull, not chain leash can hold me/
I'm comin' with the force like Obi Won Kenobi//
Call me the Joker, why so serious? i'm insane/
U'll never forget me, I'll carve my name in ya brain//
Split ya wig, untill u wearin' a toupée/
You ainta threat, i'll treat u like Y2K//
Fuck the octogon, I'm on a Rampage like Jackson/
I'll leave yall niggas like skinny gymnists doin' backflips//
Y'all in danger, and here i come, the rap savior/
Tryna fuck wth me is devient behavior//
Serve ya ass today, and double it tomarrow/
I'll cut up ya rhymes with blades shaper than Leonardo's//


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Post by - Mutual - »

okay sum of the lines didnt rhymes
but the flow was aiight
had some good imagery inthere
i mean um i been here 3 months or ova sumin like dat
i only get one feed to my pieces if i'm lucky jus live without feed
fuck em all
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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