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Timeless, Throughout Eighteen Ages My Minds Set
On Becoming Success With Each Breath Until My Death
A Gamble For Stakes That'll Pass Average Dice Bets
Utilizin' What Ever Time That Winds In My Life Left
Haulin' Weight Prayin' That My Spine Don't Knot
Until My Vitals Stop And That Final Tock
Finalizes Life, Every Second That Ticks
Towards The Depths Of Ditch Become More Precious To Risk
Got Treasures To Get, Uh And The Pressure Is Thick
Money Can't Buy Happiness But My Mood'll Be Better With It
Need A Substantial Raise In My Current Financial State
Only Got One Life To Live So It's A Chance I Have To Take
Acclumate Funds And Get Away From The Scum
So My Family Isn't Pushin' Weight In The Slums
Can't Wait In A Slump Must Break Away And Make Sums
Good Things Come To Those Who Wait I've Been Patient Enough
Through The Scrapes And The Scuffs I've Stayed Unfaded And Tough
Anxious, Face In A Bluff, Yup The Days Have Been Rough
But Until I'm Never In Debt I Won't Settle For Less
Then A Couple Mills So I Never Have To Stress An Expense
I'll Never Relent, So To Bring An Ease To My Troubles
While I Breath I Will Hustle Towards My Cheese Till It's Increases Is Doubled
Got Family On The Way The Seeds Is Sprouting To Off-Spring
But I Can't Enjoy It Because Unemployeement Is Daunting
The Haunting, Of Lifes Luxurys Is Taunting
Acheive,With A Level That's Godly
Bodily Form Has Strength But Exhaust Me
Sinnin' To Live Is Resulting In Prolonged Heat
Life Is A Lullaby Do Re Mi Singin' Off Beat
Gotta Pull Myself Together And Buckle Down Like Car Seats
Babies Are Goin' To Cost Me
An Arm And A Leg They Gone Give Me Back When Their Walking
They Brought Me Inspiration, I'm Calming
Soothed For The Time Until God Finally Calls Me!

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Post by Subsist »

this is a great piece filled with emotion. the flow and multis were amazing but you were slacking a bit at the end.

if it's really a key style then you really killed it.

if its a written its still a very good job.

you know yourself.
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Post by Chernobyl »

yea this peice had great Imagery i actually like your flow,

But you Guy's dont leave a lot of replies around huh??

Got Family On The Way The Seeds Is Sprouting To Off-Spring
But I Can't Enjoy It Because Unemployeement Is Daunting
The Haunting, Of Lifes Luxurys Is Taunting
Acheive,With A Level That's Godly
Bodily Form Has Strength But Exhaust Me


Was probably most indepth Part too me,but tight flow all around
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Post by Flux »

For Subsist...Killed It :)

Chernobyl...Good Lookin' I Like That Part The Best Also...But I Ran Out Of Words To Rhyme Cuz Is Was 3 In The Morning Good Lookin' Out Ya'll
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Post by Arvincible »

Good shit man good to have u on this site, we've been lacking ppl with originality here and u really brought it.

Multis weren't so complex, it felt more like end rhyming but that's not a bad thing at all, its a good keystyle man really good, it seemed u put a lot into it for a keystyle considering the length, but yeah nice vocab and emotion, really set the tone. Good job.
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I Dont See Nothing Special About It And Nothing Good, But I'm Not Saying Its Wack. NO HATE
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Post by - Mutual - »

shit this piece was pretty good nice multies had great emotion in this piece considerin it's a keystyle it's great(better than my writtens)but if it is written then it's still pretty dope shit n keep'em comin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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Post by Omega Bill »

Don't mind -ViP he only likes what he drops, which is absolute garbage, you should hear his audios. He's a piece of shit and Illest's residential country bumpkin hater.

Good piece. For a keystyle you did really well. Real nice multis too man.
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Post by ÐÛÇ£» »

Lmaoooo
@ Flux.. Nice Drop..
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Good Looks I Did It Cuz No One Was Online And I Got Bored It Shouldn't Be The Best Thing You've Ever Read lmao
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Post by thaphantom »

Honestly I'm feelin' it. i'm sorta back illest. so get ready for "More Garbage" Lol But yeah. nice post was deep. was very flowetical. Like each rhyme hit to a "T" was a low ending but it still went hard.
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