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40 barz of pain - first few bars-

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The sad direction, we are headed-in
is congestion, causing my head-ta-spin
To Much Medicine, Need More Excedrin
We Are Led-Ta-Sin, By Your Deception
So Now Let-Us-In, To Your Perception
Where Lecturing, Becomes A Profession
My Lesson Is, Blank Ballots "No-Question!"
Show-Aggression, Look At The Mess-Ur-In
Its A Flowed-Message, For Every Speciment
That Throws-Effort-In, Your Brain Stressing
Then Its hemorrhaging, With Pain Severing
The Rain-Never-Ends, Can't Substain Reverance
I Blamed-Hesistance, b4 Had Shame-Ever-Since
Thats Plain-Evidence, Now I Sustain-Excellence
Through Pestilents, Like Viral Blessed-In-This
Style-Etched-In-Prints, I'm A Perfectionist
with Extra-Hits, To Leave The Rest-Ya-Dissed
My Session Is Wild, To Much Estrogen-Vialed
Vains Liable, To Explode LIke An Insane-Pyro
My Brain-Spirals, From Extreme-Intelligence
Which Seems-Eloquent, But Deemed-Irrelevant
You CAn Circumvent, Then For Certain-Vent
To Work-A-Pen, Should Be Your First-Intent
I Circle-Lames,In Games Like Commercial-Planes
An Immense-Flow, That Travels Thru A Pencil
Last edited by complexity on Tue Oct 24, 2006 5:52 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

sorry i thought it said 40 bars.. my mistake lol

eitherway.. i liked this alot.. good use of vocab.. good use of multis.. nice flow to it.. made sense...nice shit 9/10
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