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remember back when we were rappin addicts
and that fag plex would spit mad spasmic
now obsessed with bandwith and ad-clicks
he's lackin the magic he always had, shit.

domino backlashin at these bastard pussies
causin catastrophies while attackin rookies
mister sinister with a history of violence
now forced to listen to bitches like dead silence.

jesus lived when evil crept beneath the sciptures
never leave the drink the priest was speakin pictures
believe it bitches the fiend never meet defeat
but now sober he retreats to weavin beats

once was a sillouate that made ur pillow wet
with a lyrics set that diminished vets
but now the ghost is gone much is lost
away to fight real wars with guns and blood

those days are gone where words raped your moms
a battle zone once made by a fake called tom
once things were right words stinged all night
now it stinks board filled with wrinkled dikes
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nice

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wow I like it
good punchlines
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some of the punches were pretty good
i liked the flow
the concept was nice
keep'em comin hopefully you'll get a reply script
could be funny
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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can someone delete both these feeds because i dont accept them. (dead silence dont feed me either). thanks and try not to post in my threads thnx very much.
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<i> yeah.. back in the days haha, nah this peice was alright nothing great, but good seeing you back on sceeeen </i>
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..Fuck that gay shit you say on a beat..
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i liked the flow alot...was feelin what you were saying in this and agree...good shit sub

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Post by complexity »

"remember back when we were rappin addicts
and that fag plex would spit mad spasmic
now obsessed with bandwith and ad-clicks
he's lackin the magic he always had, shit."

i'm still a charismatic son of a bitch with a better view of the revenue

"domino backlashin at these bastard pussies
causin catastrophies while attackin rookies
mister sinister with a history of violence
now forced to listen to bitches like dead silence. "

Jester (not to be confused with ekoms)

"jesus lived when evil crept beneath the sciptures
never leave the drink the priest was speakin pictures
believe it bitches the fiend never meet defeat
but now sober he retreats to weavin beats"

Horrible rhyming, but good point.

"once was a sillouate that made ur pillow wet
with a lyrics set that diminished vets
but now the ghost is gone much is lost
away to fight real wars with guns and blood"

Ghost isn't an Illest original, but shouts to Ghost.

"those days are gone where words raped your moms
a battle zone once made by a fake called tom
once things were right words stinged all night
now it stinks board filled with wrinkled dikes"

That fake would still lyrically murder you with my hands behind my back.

Overall:8/10, I enjoyed it.
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Post by -MiiLz. »

It Was Nice In Areas, You Were Humorous in Parts.

remember back when we were rappin addicts
and that fag plex would spit mad spasmic
now obsessed with bandwith and ad-clicks
he's lackin the magic he always had, shit."

^^^ Hmm Not Bad The Multies Was Nice.


"domino backlashin at these bastard pussies
causin catastrophies while attackin rookies
mister sinister with a history of violence
now forced to listen to bitches like dead silence. "

This Was a Funny Bar

"jesus lived when evil crept beneath the sciptures
never leave the drink the priest was speakin pictures
believe it bitches the fiend never meet defeat
but now sober he retreats to weavin beats"

^^^ i Like The Metaphor

"once was a sillouate that made ur pillow wet
with a lyrics set that diminished vets
but now the ghost is gone much is lost
away to fight real wars with guns and blood"

^^^ This Ya Weakest Bars

"those days are gone where words raped your moms
a battle zone once made by a fake called tom
once things were right words stinged all night
now it stinks board filled with wrinkled dikes"


^^^ Best Out Of All ..Ya First 2 Lines Best Bars in My Eyes.




Over All This Was Aiigh You Had A Nice Flow. Fell Off On Second Part, The Rest Went Through Smoothly. You Was Forcing Ya Multies Where Flow Fell Off in Areas. But This Verse Wasnt That Bad. Ima Have To Rate This Like 6.5/10 Considering i Was Only Feeling Some Of The Lines But Thats My Honest Opinion.
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