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Little Sammy

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<b> NAME : Sam Perry
AGE : 14
GENDER : MALE

little Sammy is never speaking-or-shit he wishes he was dreaming-of-it
dreaming of what? his mother being beaten-and-hit, it's creeping-the-kid
he anit sleeping-it's-sick, because he's getting abused-shattered-and-chased
Sams a confused-matter-of-space, seeing his mother's bruised-and-battered-face
he's going crazy, so sammy is fishing-when-can,it's like sammy is living-a-man
in his life shit just keeps hitting-the-fan, and he's just not giving-a-damn
he's failing at school, turning to drugs he's just hanging-with-mean-kids
sam started slanging-them-weed-things, and got into banging-with-teen-crims
Sam was in jail when he heard his mother died, he almost choked-to-his-death
hands shaking.. what he wrote-was-mess but it said fuck this shit then put a rope-to-his-neck..
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okay

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It was ight
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<i> upping </i>
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Post by - Mutual - »

yeah alotta emotion all the way thru this piece the end was pretty dope i liked it it gave more of a thrill or sumin like that the multies was dope all the way thru i knew ya was dope at mutlies but this was shit hot all the way thru man keep'em comin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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its a good piece, wish it was longer though.
I can see you are trying to improve your multi's but
you need to make sure you don't start forcing
rhymes and loosing sense.
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Post by |.R.SON.aLL.| »

This Was aiight ..
Multies Was Kinda Forced Where He Started Gettin in Trouble ..
Umm ..That Speaking Or Shit, Dreaming Of it ..
Coulda Been Worded Better ..
Real Short Didn't Really Kiill Tha Verse Or Topic But it Was Better Than A lot Of Other Shit That Gets Posted On Here ..
Props Kid ..
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