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tha most ill of tha illest rollin wit militant killaz
stackin these earnings i earn un until they stack to the celin
filling ya brain wit these verses
converted scriptures from churches//
such an intelligent person wit bursting lyrical urges
im spittin raw till im fallin into tha ground in my coffin//
put on my mask and my gloves hit the block and go shoppin
aint no stoppin the lyrical prophet im tight like a locket//
alot a niggaz be talkin but dont be doin the walkin
and i be smoking on chocolate blunts the size of rockets//
something like baby huey but instead i COCK BACK AND POP IT
you bitch nigaz better stay calm
OR IMA COME OUT THA SUNROOF WIT THA MOXBURY DRAWN

a little sumtin for my first drop
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Post by Haz »

Not Impressive..
im Sayin .. It's Ya Firs Drop Though..
Dont Fuck With Played Concepts..
ya whole Flow Could be betta..
ya Could come Harda.. Don't have Much To Say
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Post by - Mutual - »

man i think the exact opposite i mean this was great to me i liked the flow
i liked the concept and good first drop man keep'em comin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Post by MadKNiFe »

Hmmn. . Maybe the verse was not properly structured but it had nice flows, I must say and the first few lines were cool. .
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Post by Bobby Star »

^^ I agree first few lines and flow was good.. overall imma give it a 7/10 but yo iF you gonna do a Cypher make sure it got sum punche's coz you know ya gotta stay Fly n Fresh like New sneakers! ha
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