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Post by - Mutual - »

damm haz this was sum good shit i've got two of ya songs the other one was better but jus to me this was good nice vocab and flow
stayed onpoint
keep'em comin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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Post by Frank Black »

nice shit homie lyrics cool flow got a lil funny buh yu stayed wit it...imo
emotion mic presence all nice man keep it up..

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Hell Yeah Lets Get It..
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cool send me a track witta open slot my friend!
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Post by Scip »

liked the beat...ur flow was off at some but u made up for it...overal i was feelin it i was bobbin my head a little

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Word.. Good Looks Homie.. ima Leave U Feed Righ Now..
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Post by Çhåiñ$âw »

Hell yea Haz, that's some fire right there. Flow was on point, had some nice original concepts. There were a few spots that the beat didn't mesh well with your flow, but nothing that can't be fixed with a little editing. Keep that shit comin' f'sho.
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Thanks Alot For The Feed Tecniq...i'll Take ya Constructive Critism And
And Use it to My Benefit..i'll Return The Feed..


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Post by MesaR »

ok man your writtens dont do much for me, but this track was dope proved alot of people wrong for sure man, the lyrics were nice alot of inners helped your flow aswell, delivery was good, a pretty smooth track.
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Post by Dead Silence »

ehh didnt like the beat too much.
your lyrics were straight for the most part.

fell off flow a bit. but not much only in a part.
i liked it overall as a song aside from the beat.
wish it woulda been longer tho.but good shit famm
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Post by Kurse »

I like the "Get in my path and re-arrange bones" line with the few bars that follow after that one. Good descriptions and good bars...ended with a good punch. Shit made me laugh.

Decent choice in beat. Not my style...it's more like that Jay-z style, but you still did the beat sum justice. I can see the area's that the other members above said you fell off, but it wasn't real noticable for the mostpart. The only thing I'd say is there's a few parts where you stretch the word and it sounds more like a hesitation. Like when you say "Suc-cess"
"Fuck-Less" & "Suck-Yes" It doesn't sound bad, cuz I know ur switchin up the flow. But when you break it down like that after keepin the flow at a pretty steady rate for the majority of the track...it kinda seems off compared to what you were doing because you only spit 1 verse. If you're only gonna do 1 verse, you would've been better off keeping ur flow consistantly the same from start to finish. But none the less it was solid.
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Post by Haz »

Aight. Feeds Appreciated Good Looks
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Post by HKX »

i keep shit blunt as fuck...shit was decent not bad of a track think u could've shown sum more emotion on it but overall shit was aight u fell off a lil but u caught urself and dats a good thing nigga
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Post by Omega Bill »

You're getting better and better on the tracks man. I thought the last one was tight, and this one outshines it. Keep at this shit and you can only go up.
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Nice Track ..Get At Me Audio Now ..Set it Up i Cant Record At Tha Moment But Will Reply ..
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