Full Moon

[iwin]

Two lovers sat on the park bench, making out. romantic night; full moon.


:: :: ::

my eyes grew wide; it was happening! as the plot thickens i ran thru alley backends
barefooted n scratched with fragments of sharp rocks, sticks, twigs snappin
followed a passage back into the woodlands before my transformation acted in
into grass clearing swiftly ran stampeding, ligaments bruised now calloused & bleeding
frantically weeping, fell to my knees, clutched the soil with rage & asked for meaning..
with savage eyes, I shouted glancing at the sky:

"Why me?"

hoping the milky full moon would answer my cry. I wished for death, or a new afterlife.
to no avail moon remained silent as night. & began to control the better part of my mind.
by now I was more weaker than before, the same fever that soared last week
before I transformed, I grieved & screamed for sure:

"I dont want to hurt anyone, please no more" !


SUDDENLY. my skin became itchy, hair-sprouted pores & a full-fledged ribcage instantly built me!
my face fidgety, thick veins swelled up & protruded forth, innards churned, knife-like cuticles
body doubled in size & bulk, a wonderful jawline stuck out from my newly acquired skull!
lungs expanded, causing dry heaves & some wet hacking coughs
followed by a staggering pause. then a ringing headache crashed thru my cranium walls.
on the surface now, wuz blood curdling howls bursting of a thirsty lust for crowds
but the transformation pain was too profound, as glass-shattering roars of agonizing sound
echoed thru out the jungle, & I collapsed heavily on the soft, moist ground!
breathing; I knew what would eventually come, nothing can reverse havoc now
last thing I remembered, a pale circle in the sky, then I blacked out…

:: :: ::

Two lovers sat on the park bench, making out. romantic night; full moon.
not knowing that they would soon meet their end by

a werewolf.

[- Mutual -]

Yo this was a nice piece man
nice concept stayed on point
9/10 good shit

SUDDENLY. my skin became itchy, hair-sprouted pores & a full-fledged ribcage instantly built me!
my face fidgety, thick veins swelled up & protruded forth, innards churned, knife-like cuticles
body doubled in size & bulk, a wonderful jawline stuck out from my newly acquired skull!
lungs expanded, causing dry heaves & some wet hacking coughs

my fave bit^
keep'em comin

[Çhåiñ$âw]

This is a great piece of work here. Great concept with awesome depth and imagry. I realize that the rhyme scheme wasn't nearly as important as the other aspects in this work, but the lines are quite stretched causing it to read more like a story in some portions. Aside from that, this is some great work. Keep it up.

8/10

Tek

[Frank Black]

nice piece fam concept & all and i liked the flow to it
G.J