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[align=center]Hence Was A Village Of Gnomes..
Not To Far Off The Mountains..
Where Griffins Wandered The CLouds And,Trickles Of Sugar Water Echoed Off Of The Fountains..
Children Would Shout Uproarious With Joy And Excitement..
For The Sun Brought Happiness Forth..While The Poison Subsided..
There Was A Dwarf Who Cried In A High Pitch Later To Be Hoisted In Silence..
Not A Soul Could Point Out The Tyrant..So They Kept Their Poise Till Horizons
Filled The Skys With Pigment Blobs..While The Soil Grew Moist As Their Eyes Dripped..
With Tears Full Of Sorrow..They Prayed And Hoped God's Own Voice Could Find Him..
Unsure He'd Be Left Ashore On An Island..Where He'd Rely On A Talking Oyster For Guidance..
Of Course He was Frightened..Him Being A Child In Worry
The First Thought Was To Burst Off Through The Jungle Out In A Hurry..
Until The Empyrean Became Cloudy And Blurry..The Oyster Shouted In Rage..!
"Littlelun..Wheres A Boy Like You Off To With So Much Energy?",Think Your Bound To Escape?..
"Dear Child The Only Way For You To Return Home With Strands Of Evolution.."
"Is To Retrieve These Items On My Sinched Record Viewing ..Holding Dynamic Retribution"
You must Bring Forth The Head of Lochness,And Tail Of A Shark..
"An Eye Of A Giant Squid..Then Indeed Your Trail Will Be Marked"..
Unsure Of Caution The Eager Boy Sat There For Days..
Creating Net Traps.. Harpoon Daggers..From Mere Tree Branches And Canes..!
Believing Him..The Dwarf Bolted Straight Towards The Sea..
Surfing Waves While The Breeze Shifted His Board That Was Made Out Of Leaves..
Soaring Out The Water A Shark Had Appeared..!
Thrashed And Sheared The Body Parts In One Clear Swipe Across The Hearts Jacket Gear..
Then A Massive Squid Shuttled..Exposing Subtle Vex..
The Boy Swung His Edge!..Peeling The It's Eye Covering Back,Leaving Clumps Of Flesh..!
As His Face Sparkled With Tears..But That Wouldnt Cease The Approach..
So He Ignored The Gore..And Kept Paddling..Making A Slow Proceed Towards The Coast..
There Cloaked In The Shadows Was A Face So Placid
It Surged A Violent Rush Then Silence Struck .. As Mild Must Drew Through His Nasal Passage..
Speaking To Himself He Yelled "Faster!" Hoping Rapid Strokes Would Improve..
Overall Range Determined Between Himself And The Zone Of The Brute..
The Lochness Followed..Until The Path Led Him Home..
And Changed Enhance His Community By Completing The Task Of The Poem..
Finally Life Was Back To Normal..Many Smiles Were Totalled..Most Abided Sorrow
Families Settled Down ..Enjoying Their Lives As Mortals
But As Soon As Their Minds Could Port To That Life In First Rate
The Sky Turned Gray..Decline In Their Day Seemed Nothing Like An Earthquake
Wiffing The Fragrance Of Water..Communities Saw The Oceans Tide As Their Fate
As Land Level Was SLightly Decreasing Presenting The Brine Of Their Days...
Ones Mind Couldn't Portray That They'd Be Drowned For Eternity
Especially ELijah's After Defeating The Most Vigorous Scoundrels Of A Murderous Sea
Oxygen Had Been Abolished From The Seahorses And Infants Faces Of Trouble.
Arena's,Parks,Schools..Hell Even Churches Had Disipated To Rubble..
..The Oyster Ridiculed.."How Clever!..The Silly Boy Intended For His Community To Have A "Deep Image Free Of Antics.".
"But Becareful What You Wish For"...."Now I Shall Name This Borough The City Of Atlantis!"..[/align]
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Brandon Heat (KO)
Falix (KO)
KraZyLyrical (KO)
Yasii(KO)
Led Poison(KO)
Jay 3rd (KO)
Demo (KO)
Pdubz (KO)
M.Flight (KO)
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shit you a hot assed writer
r u recycling btw jus askin cus you write way to much to quick but that means u got talent
nice flow
nice vocab
stayed on point nicely

Then A Massive Squid Shuttled..Exposing Subtle Vex..
The Boy Swung His Edge!..Peeling The It's Eye Covering Back,Leaving Clumps Of Flesh..!
As His Face Sparkled With Tears..But That Wouldnt Cease The Approach..
So He Ignored The Gore..And Kept Paddling..Making A Slow Proceed Towards The Coast..
There Cloaked In The Shadows Was A Face So Placid
It Surged A Violent Rush Then Silence Struck .. As Mild Must Drew Through His Nasal Passage..

my fave bit^
keep'em comin
Last edited by - Mutual - on Sat Jun 28, 2008 1:16 am, edited 1 time in total.
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Post by Vertikal »

Some Venomous shit..




















Yes I Know.
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Post by Dynamiq »

thanks for the feed guys..haha humor i see.

and yes this was recycled..old work but not to old..im writing fresh stuff for other topicals..and ill show battles from other sites as well.
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Falix (KO)
KraZyLyrical (KO)
Yasii(KO)
Led Poison(KO)
Jay 3rd (KO)
Demo (KO)
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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

good shit, i like the storyline, the picture was koo too, its good to see someone who can stay on topic and use their elements well
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Post by Kvarshilesheoi »

dopeeeeeeeeee storyline with the pix
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Post by Dynamiq »

thanks for the feed..
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8-0-8
Brandon Heat (KO)
Falix (KO)
KraZyLyrical (KO)
Yasii(KO)
Led Poison(KO)
Jay 3rd (KO)
Demo (KO)
Pdubz (KO)
M.Flight (KO)
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Post by MadKNiFe »

The piece was dope . . the flow was on thru out. . i'd say a 9.8

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Post by Dynamiq »

thanks for the feed i appreciate it.
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8-0-8
Brandon Heat (KO)
Falix (KO)
KraZyLyrical (KO)
Yasii(KO)
Led Poison(KO)
Jay 3rd (KO)
Demo (KO)
Pdubz (KO)
M.Flight (KO)
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Post by Glamtrash »

Good shit guy. I liked the storyline - lots of imagination and good use of wording. The picture was also a nice touch.
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Post by Dynamiq »

no doubt no doubt i feel that man.

please drop links to your pieces so i can feed them,thank you.
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Brandon Heat (KO)
Falix (KO)
KraZyLyrical (KO)
Yasii(KO)
Led Poison(KO)
Jay 3rd (KO)
Demo (KO)
Pdubz (KO)
M.Flight (KO)
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Post by Dynamiq »

Word. thanks for the feed man long time talk whats up with you these days..

its Joel..hint hint.
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8-0-8
Brandon Heat (KO)
Falix (KO)
KraZyLyrical (KO)
Yasii(KO)
Led Poison(KO)
Jay 3rd (KO)
Demo (KO)
Pdubz (KO)
M.Flight (KO)
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Post by DressToKill »

I like your Vocab duke..you paint a nice picture and use multies correctly :) I am pleased
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Post by Dynamiq »

thanks for the feed man really appreciate..
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8-0-8
Brandon Heat (KO)
Falix (KO)
KraZyLyrical (KO)
Yasii(KO)
Led Poison(KO)
Jay 3rd (KO)
Demo (KO)
Pdubz (KO)
M.Flight (KO)
All Time Text Record
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