chk this out ! my Crew cypher !

[Bobby Star]

its My crew on LB ! i did a cypher to represent ! give some HONEST feedback!!

.:EvOlUtIoN:./Past,Present & Future!
We The SICKEST OF EMCEE'S n' KING'S OF THIS LB! So If you dont wanna LOSE A FIGHT then CHOSE IT RIGHT coz We da SLICKEST OF TEXTCEE'S n' BEST DA SITE' SEEN!! Better REST OR FIGHT TEAM coz we Dont TEST THE LIGHT BEAM! So them BUNCH OF GAYS'LL MISS their LUNCH FOR DAY'S n' STILL.. EVO' REPS n' SPRAY'S them EIGHT'S n' K'S! To Leave SHIT TALKIN CREW'S with TRICK'S LOCKED n' BRUIZED! Like 'hoe's who didnt pay' their PIMPS, ROCK'S n' JEWELS!! SO QUIT n' STOP US FOOLZ!!
We Leave DUDE'S, SHATTERED n' OUT COLD! We SOME HARD HITTERS,SPAR WITH US? Its TRUE, SPLATTERED n' ACTS BOLD coz EVO'S RAW SPITTERS! Leave DUMB DAWGS WRITTENS where they should've been kept in MINDS, HEARTS BITCHES!! When was LYING SMART SNITCHES! we all know our rank 'is top 5'.. their ranks high when TAKING WEED, METH n' E! So If you FAKE'S NEED HELP INDEED dont bother asking..We'll just SLAP HEADS n' LEAVE!! GOTTA PROBLEM ? then SHOTTA'S SOLVEM! With GATZ SPRAYED THEN GRIEVE!! We Got BLADES COLLECTED FROM ASSASINS KIDS! on some 'sicker shit' Like AIDS CONNECTED WITH SYPHILIS!!! you In DANGER QUICK We deRANGED AS SHIT!! So ATTACKIN US, THINK FAST coz we dont LACK FACTS AS MUCH.. as them BITCH FAGZ!!! and iT RIPS BAD! So SAVE THE SPEECH..We don't TALK WITH GEEKS! We just LACE n' BEAT then GRAZE DAH HEAT So them NERDS'LL SEE 'EvOlUtIoN' brings FAKE'S n' CHEATS their WORSE DEFEAT! As we BLAST n' LET THE TRUTH SQUIRT,WE BRUIZE n' HURT and We know 'everything' Coz we THE PAST,PRESENT n' FUTURE!!

[Bobby Star]

ohh and the words in CAPS are MULTIES !!

[- Mutual -]

nice flow
nice multies
reppin well
good shit
8.5/10

TAKING WEED, METH n' E! So If you FAKE'S NEED HELP INDEED dont bother asking..We'll just SLAP HEADS n' LEAVE!! GOTTA PROBLEM ? then SHOTTA'S SOLVEM! With GATZ SPRAYED THEN GRIEVE!! We Got BLADES COLLECTED FROM ASSASINS KIDS! on some 'sicker shit' Like AIDS CONNECTED WITH SYPHILIS!!!

my fave bit^
keep'em comin
nice stuff

[Bobby Star]

can i get more feedback on this !

[MesaR]

uh this was alright, some lines were forced though, there was some good flow in there for a while, but it did fall off. and this peice was lacking in punches

[DisIghtWack]

Fix your structure, nobody wants to read a paragraph ran on like that it's annoying as fuck

Multies aren't anything special, the punches you tried are played/weak

It's a cypher, but you're not giving anything good here, no creativity, where is it?

Work on your creative, flow is good for the most part with average multies, up your vocab

you got potential though