A Perfect World.

Glamtrash · Post by **Glamtrash** » Sat Jun 21, 2008 2:08 pm

In the depths of the tropical island
There lay a world of unimaginable perfection
The lucious palette of colours
Are reflected in the glistening water

An endless array of aromas
Sting the nose with delight
Waves once bold and powerful trickle a hasty retreat
After an encounter with a steadfast shoreline

There is a battle of logic in this place
Nothing and everything is happening simultaneously
A place where fantasies collide
To create the perfect world

This place of perfection and beauty, so full of life
Lay in a spot many do not venture
Deep within ones heart

Arvincible · Post by **Arvincible** » Sat Jun 21, 2008 2:55 pm

Stings the nose with delight...

Wow beautiful paradox

Sweeet I know u fuckin wrote it in like 10 minutes!

But its still very good.

Strong word choices and nice way to pertain to the five senses with the imagery.

Dead Silence · Post by **Dead Silence** » Sun Jun 22, 2008 3:41 am

wow FL.
reallll good shit.
props.
i felt this a whole lot. imagery was great. good looks

Glamtrash · Post by **Glamtrash** » Tue Jun 24, 2008 3:52 am

Thanks. You can all thank Arv for being like "I'm boreddd....write something!!"

Glamtrash · Post by **Glamtrash** » Tue Nov 11, 2008 10:36 pm

Thanks dude.

Lawgix · Post by **Lawgix** » Fri Dec 05, 2008 10:59 am

this was deeeeeeep.... i liked it alot... keep it up... real good shit

Def-init · Post by **Def-init** » Sat Dec 27, 2008 9:22 pm

Very nice.

"An endless array of aromas
Sting the nose with delight
Waves once bold and powerful trickle a hasty retreat
After an encounter with a steadfast shoreline "

Very slick...
Good work across all stanzas!

Drop some more, I am interested in ur style of writing.

A Perfect World.

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