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the sleepless (k)nite daydreaming of 40 Winks, as minits go past in the Blink of an eye//
"ill do it later" are the words of a man whos hopes will be soon vilified//
the next day saying "ill do it tomorrow", youve unwittingly traduced everything you hope your day to derive//
a fools "interest" is "confounded" daily, untill everything is such a tangled mess that hes terrified//
do not let life pass you by...
or youll be stuck in cessation, witnessing children building castles with the sands of time//

took a line i had in my notebook, and expanded the idea, could be done better,

yes its very complicated, i over complicated it on purpose, its part of the metaphor lol,

i donno, let me hear what ya think
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Post by Borat »

yea i like this...very different...good stuff donnie
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Depth wrote:good stuff donnie
LMAO it's good donnie real good...
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yeah it was a Nice peace...
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..Fuck that gay shit you say on a beat..
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well...it is haha, am i bieng mocked?...
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Post by precise »

thanks for the feed, nah i think hes laughin at my name lmao, (bad idea) haha
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Donnie...this is sooo good, i think you have earned these ( . Y. ) << breasts...hahah Yes!
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Post by precise »

wow, when the fuck did i do this? i didnt know i had anything in this section lmao, damn i did do alot of drinkin last year
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dude i remember when you posted this... haha long ass time ago.
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Holy fuck I didn't even know you knew where DC was...lol. Visit more often. Also, I love it.
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