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Debut Performance - Raiza Sharp

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Didn't know where to put this but..
Hey u gotta start somewhere .
My first performance at my schools talent show
Wrote the song over a period of 4 days.
Gay ass mic kept cuttin out too. But oh well.
Sorry for the camera, my friend recorded it on his phone
Songs called Untitled .
Used the Just Might Be Okay - Instrumental by lupe fiasco
Singer: Brianna Iturra


http://youtube.com/watch?v=0kB0AhXqhig
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Post by Momeijah »

Lol Good Shit as Far as Stage Presence And Delivery Went, Lyrics i Didn't Really Make Out.

So Here's Some Feedback On Said Performance. it Was Good But u Spent Quite Long Periods Of Time Just Pacing Around Waving ur Arms About, Which is What Rappers Do Obviously But NOT SOOO MUCH Lol.

The Broad Was Just Standing Around Too, So Here's My Advice. Play The Crowd More AND The Girl. Sure, u Kept a Good Enough Connection With The Audience. u Didn't Stutter Much, u Made Eye Contact (Probably) And Kept ur Shoulders Up Etc, Kuuuudos Because Stage Fright is Like The 1st GIANT Obstacle For Some People.

But But But, u Gtta Put More Feeling into it So it Doesn't Wind Up All Robotic And Routine-Like. When im Playing Live (Which Hasn't Happened a Lot But Yeah) im Constantly Connecting With Other Members Of The Group. u Don't Want The Girl Standing Around She Needs To Be in The Action Too, Use Her as a Prop. Rap TO Her, Be Funny With Some Exaggerated Expressions And Motions While u Do This. Then Just Blow Her Off And Walk Off (Preferrably in The Direction Of The Audience), Do Some Stupid Poses, Walks And Dance Steps Etc. Because Dude u Already Got The Foundations For Pulling This Shit Off Good.
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Post by complexity »

Them judges would have gave you great feedback if you would have screamed them lyrics guaranteed.

I thought you started out real strong (maybe because you knew them lyrics the best or got a bit tired as it went on)

I'm really impressed and I'm sure you did better than 90 percent of us would do in the same position.
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thats real good man. atleast u moved. some ppl would have just stood there in awe. but u seem to handle it pretty well
domino pretty much covered the advice givin
good shit man
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Post by Haz »

lol Kool..

I Spit a Rap At Dis Poetry Jam..

It Was Called "Green Piece Of Paper" lol
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Post by Kurse »

Good job Raiza...
...nice comeback to the site too.

It can be a lil overwhelming to hit the stage and do shit live, but you kept ur composure and did ur thang..and that's all that matters! Hats off to ya pimp...good job.
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Post by Brah-Vo »

thanks for all the feed my dudes!
Good lookin out.
Link me to anythin u want feed on.
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Post by Stratosphere »

That was the ABSOLUTE WORSE verse I've ever heard . Stop rhymin , it's obviously not your thing . Your people hypin you must be 12 yrs old because the youth today is disillusioned about the modern day emcee . You are a makeshift rapper with an inflated view of self .Terrible !!! grade:F
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it's about him tryin fucko calm ya fuckin nerves u BUTT_PLUG
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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Post by Brah-Vo »

is it just me or is stratosphere out to get me?
Honestly dude. Hit me up once u get props on an audio or text drop that u make.
Coz far as im concerned ur shit aint all that. In fact. I'll juss say it.

Its whack as fuck. Time to stop sugar coatin it.

So its either u back ur trash talkin up or shut the fuck up.
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