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Terminal illness

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"Ever wondered, just how a cancer cell acts
Or
What it thinks as it spreads around infecting a healthy human?
Or
What goes through a victims mind?"

....Yeah, me too...

Things are received, achieved, conceived in our lives
But some strike a healthy heart, an lethal decease's arise
An' bleed from there eye's, none believing her lies
As kids stare at a 'strong mother' in disbelief that she cry's
Take a seat with a wife, which im slowly infecting
As i watch a wave of infected cells float below me injecting
A lethal incurable wave which'll lead to her death
Looks on in pain, at blood she receives from her breath
She attempts to breath, i revoke and look in
Striking with envy, from each ounce of smoke she took in

....

Sat alone wondering what'll follow this shit?
Choking on her own blood, never swallow's jus' spits
Husband tried stayin' strong despite all the sights
Refusing his help, a strong minded female fighting for life
Feeling weaker by the second, losing hair by the day
Kids staring scarily into her eye's, as she's staring astray
Tears creeping down her cheeks, holdin' em back
Approached or spoke to no-one, sat with cards re-foldin the pack
Alone in a zone knowing she was prone to death
Family become scared to approach her, so alone she's left

...

Supposed to be a mother, instead she would weep
Knowing one night she'd drift into a dead ridden sleep
And never return to tell those around there loved
Blocking them out, she's hear nothing but the sounds above
Conscience whispering, smoking had ended her life
Wondering why for so many years she pretended it's nice

...

Iv finished my mission, taught a victim a lesson
Now you've read this whole verse but your missing the question
....Did i feel at all bad for enlisting infections?
She's now in a better place, so i insist that i blessed em'
A murderous cancer cell finally dyeing away
And another victims death certificate is finally filling away
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Dope..first little paragraph has some dope multies and the starting sets the tempo nicely and zones you in..This also had a dope message..Nice shit Kay keep up
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Props, thanks dress
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Post by - Mutual - »

this some tight shit
nice flow good multies stayed on point
i liked it 8.5/10
nice first script

Iv finished my mission, taught a victim a lesson
Now you've read this whole verse but your missing the question
....Did i feel at all bad for enlisting infections?
She's now in a better place, so i insist that i blessed em'
A murderous cancer cell finally dyeing away
And another victims death certificate is finally filling away

my fave bit^
woahh good shit man
keep'em comin
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Props, thanks man
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