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A Flash Back: To Hurricane Katrina

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The Following Is Based On True Events. Viewer Discretion Is Advised.

For the record, all the quotes are from a blog i found on the internet. Just read them, it'll come together in the end....


The Following Is Based On True Events. Viewer Discretion Is Advised.
Jessica Posted On Tuesday, August 23rd, 2005 wrote:A new tropical depression formed over the Bahamas. I hope everybody is alright. I was watching the news and omg it was horrible. Houses and trees were torn down, please pray for all the victims.

August 29th, 2005 - 1 a.m.

I'm sittin on my bed, with my back to the wall; pacin
Arms wrapped around my legs, sat in the dark shakin
Satin blanket, wrapped around me, rockin back and forth waitin...
Look through the crack in the door as shadows pass in the hall
My eyes are getting irritated, It must be the glare
of this television screen that's got me trapped in a stare
Watchin the tide on the news, while my neck is tied in a noose
That's why I HANG on every word and every line that gets cued
Jessica Posted On Friday, Wednesday 24th, 2005 wrote:The tropical depression became tropical storm katrina. It looks like it's heading for Florida. Last year they got like 5 hurricanes, I feel so bad for them. My grandma lives in Ft. Lauderdale. I hope she's ok I'm gonna call her.

An hour passes

The rain starts falling, I keep my eye on the weather
As I'm yawnin...my tears glue my eyelids together
I struggle to stay awake, but I'm too scared to go to sleep
Body sweatin like I'm livin in the Arizona heat
I fear that if my eyes close, even for a second
They might never open again, until I get to heaven
I look up as the rain begins drizzle on the window
Then I.......
Jessica Posted On Thursday, August 25th, 2005 wrote:omg the tropical storm just turned into a hurricane and it's heading for Florida. I couldn't get a hold of grandma yesterday, I hope she's alright . I'll update with more later.
An hour passes

Floor shakes, the whole house rumbles and *CRACK*
I jump up onto my feet, my heart is flutterin fast
I see the lightning flash, a white stripe light ups the glass
My pulse is racing fast enough to hit the floor and run track
I walk into the bathroom, sink my face in my hands
check the mirror, rub the corners my eyes and clear the sand
I'm too amped to go to sleep, As I go back to my room
I turn on the television and get trapped in the news
Jessica Posted On Thursday, August 25th, 2005 wrote:The hurricane made landfall in florida, but I finally got a hold of my grandma and she's fine. I just hope that everyone else is alright. Please keep all the hurricane victims in your prayers.


An hour passes

Another lightning bolt hits, and then the power gets dropped
The whole street turns black, with every house on the block
I walk up into the living room with my mother and sister
Room lit up by candles as my sister shudders n shivers
Take a flashlight in my hand, check the lock on the door
Turn on the battery powered radio as I listen for more
Hurricane ain't even here yet, we already lost our power
It ain't even s'posed to make landfall for 2 more hours
Jessica Posted On Friday, August 26, 2005 wrote:omg omg omg they just said on the news that the hurricane's going to be heading to louisiana, please please please let it disappear. I tried to talk to my mom about evacuating but she said that i shouldnt worry about it. Why doesnt she ever listen to me? This is a HURRICANE it KILLS people. I hope nobody I know gets hurt I hope -I- don't get hurt . Why me? :'(
An hour passes

The news hits, a tornado just formed in the area
We get up...grab the radio, candle, lights, and then carry em
into bathroom, shut the door - Thunders again
My sister lies up in the tub, with a pillow under her head
I say a prayer in my mind, I don't cross my body or nothin
Cuz I've never had the confidence to pray in front of public
But god I'm begging you, please just let me survive
I silently think "Amen" relax and then close my eyes
Jessica Posted On Saturday, August 27th, 2005 wrote:omg, the hurricane just got even stronger. Now it's a category 3. I still can't get my mom to evacuate. I'm scared :(
An hour passes

I awaken shin deep in water, wake up my mother
Pick up my sister, open the door slowly n stutter
More water rushes in, it's nearly up to my knees
I panic barely able to move, barely able to breathe
The couch is floating in the living room, water just keeps rising
It's only been a couple minutes, already up to my eyes, n
I'm trynna find a way out, I take a deep breath and dive
Try to get out of the door for help, instead im trapped inside
Jessica Posted On Sunday, August 28th, 2005 wrote:OMG!!! I feel like i'm living in a horror movie. Every day i wake up and the hurricane gets even stronger. i'm almost ready to cry. i'm shaking so much that i can barely even type. The hurricane is supposed to be make landfall tomorrow. I'm so scared, that i don't know what to do. Please please PLEASE pray for me. If you could ever do me a bigger favor, it would be for you to pray for the safety of me and all the other people in louisiana
A life passes....

Jessica's Last Login, August 28th, 2005 at 11:07 p.m.

...Not Every Story's A Happy Ending...

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aiight well this is sum deep shit man nice flow
stayed on point
keep'em comin
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Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
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So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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Shiiit..I didnt know the history with this past member..pretty decent lyrical peice your imagery is quite nice..nothing you can really say but R.I.P.
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Post by Arvincible »

whoa...

this is a well thought out piece man, i really like it. honestly, the whole topic was moving and the way you set up the piece was sweet.

The flow is on point and it went smooth the whole way through. good shit man

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Post by 16 Micz »

real nice, it took me a while to understand wha the quotes was for, but this is nice, i think the quotes in themselves are what made this piece so good, but the verses were nice too, keep up the good work.
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say bruh u from Nawlins?
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