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[font=Comic Sans MS]Something real quick cause I saw I was leading in votes, haha. I was gonna take a break...but if I'm nominated for something like that I just can't fall off now can I? haha.

Its barely mid year, a day away from June
Writer of the year prospect gives no room
When lyrics done boom, blastin ya tomb
Yall like livin dead still scrappin fa food
Put deadcees to sleep tha yappin stops soon
Pop goons, when the glock looms, stop boo's
Comin at me, mos wanted MC poster on the news
No crews needed, I am a one man wrecking machine
Deckin ya spleen, reppin to see, but u aint steppin to me
Ima blessin the streets, with lyrics with only a rage light
Cross paths, there'll be more blood than a UFC Cage fight
Stay tight in ya own mind, cause in mine theres no time
No regard for speech, read my lines n ur words like mimes
Speechless, when you see this, no words but I can read lips
Like "How can he sling scrips" so fast with spits that outlast
The vets now n the past, the best get lit quick, body in a cast
And the rest get sick, and pass, like if Abu Dhabi gets gassed
Style is crass, ya rhymes all planned rehearsin like the same recidal
N the Writer Of The Year's gonna keep murkin till I claim my title[/font]
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Post by Omega Bill »

Yeah this was just a quick type up, haha. The title should be different.

I'll drop a nicer piece in the near future that fits the title.
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Post by Panama »

I think it was good too...


flow seems little stretched in a couple places but overall a nice read... good job
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Post by Arvincible »

this wasnt impressive at all.

structure was a tad bit terrible and the concept was confused,
flow was jumping here and there as well.

nice try though
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Post by - Mutual - »

Ima blessin the streets, with lyrics with only a rage light
Cross paths, there'll be more blood than a UFC Cage fight
Stay tight in ya own mind, cause in mine theres no time
No regard for speech, read my lines n ur words like mimes

My Fave Bit^
nice flow multies and shiit i hopr ya get the award
Keep'em comin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Post by |.R.SON.aLL.| »

Lmfao Omfg ..
I Thought This Shit Was Gon Be Sick ..
Wtf ..
Thas Not Writer Of Tha Year Status Fam ..
U Gotta Come Harder Than That ..
Shit I Feel Like I Was Cheated ..
Cus Man ..I Readin Like "Man He Gon Get Sick On This Part" ..
Hell Nah ..
Big Dissappointment ..
U Gotta Start Where Tha Last One Ended Fam ..
Ya Last One Was impressive ..
U Goin Backwards ..
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.. it`s S.a.W Bitches ..
.. Niggas ain't Fuckin Wit Tha Team ..

JayGUNNa
RELL FiaSCO

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Post by Omega Bill »

Rell, man, lol. Read what I said about it, haha.

If yall want a sick ass piece, a sick ass piece you'll get.
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Post by Haz »

Yeah Please a sick Ass Piece is Whats Needed
Lmfao Cause The Title Did Not Go Good With The Verse
Keep Droppin Though Brotha...
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