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What goes through the mind of a paedophile, after hes raped a child
Is he satisfied, does he raise a smile, or does he think the rape was vile
Inside the mind of an innocent man, alone in a cell, only friend`s the wall
He got robbed, so no spend to call, stockpiling them pills wanna end it all
Or a wife battered on the daily, but still in the kitchen cookin all the same
Cookin through the pain, theres a way out but is she lookin through the rain
Ur tryna inject but u cant find a vein, do you still get pleasure from the buzz
Under pressure for a buck, could OD, knowin the wrong measure n ur fucked
If u got a 50/50 operation, lifes out ur control, your accounting that on men
Will u wake?, minds slippin, what u thinkin when ur counting back from 10
Ur religious and ur kid is dead, do u forgive the killer n accept that its fate
Does it make u question the faith, if no is it a sin to want vengeance n hate
Ur a world war vet, witnessed atrocities, block it out by shuttin the eyelids
But when their shut u hear sirens, a proud soldier, so do u suffer in silence
Your sons a freedom fighter, 16 years old, got a bomb strapped to the chest
Do you feel trapped in the mess, or no regrets, with this act he`ll be blessed
My mates killers, I dream of seeing their thoughts as my knife slice their neck..
He went through strife for respect, as he bled to death did he view life with regret
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He got robbed, so no spend to call, stockpiling them pills wanna end it all
Or a wife battered on the daily, but still in the kitchen cookin all the same
Cookin through the pain, theres a way out but is she lookin through the rain
Ur tryna inject but u cant find a vein, do you still get pleasure from the buzz
Under pressure for a buck, could OD, knowin the wrong measure n ur fucked

WOOOW. Dat Wus ill Son..

Loved Da Last 2 Lines... Floow Wus Bananaz...

My mates killers, I dream of seeing their thoughts as my knife slice their neck..
He went through strife for respect, as he bled to death did he view life with regret
^^ Niiice Way To End it..

Honestly.. In My Own Opinion Ima Give DIs a 10 Cus i Wus Feelin it Like Dat...
People Underestimate U Alot.. In My Opinion If i Aint Countin Me Or Bill..
U SHould Be Writer Of Da Year.. I Feel Like its a Match Between Us Three...
U Deffo Executed Dis Shit Nice Though. Real Talk... Loved The Way U Put it Togetha..

Keep it Up.. And Look Out For My Next Drop Aiight..

10/10
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i got to agree wit Haz nice shit man defo 10/10
nice flow,multies and the beautiful ending

My mates killers, I dream of seeing their thoughts as my knife slice their neck..
He went through strife for respect, as he bled to death did he view life with regret

brilliant

Inside the mind of an innocent man, alone in a cell, only friend`s the wall
He got robbed, so no spend to call, stockpiling them pills wanna end it all
Or a wife battered on the daily, but still in the kitchen cookin all the same
Cookin through the pain, theres a way out but is she lookin through the rain

My fave Bit ^
Keep'em comin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Post by Cee4 »

thanks for the feed people. its appreciated
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Post by Panama »

Yeah, really good all throughout.. man... I really enjoyed this read...

I wanna see some more like this..
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Post by MadKNiFe »

What am I thinking?? lol, that piece is a master. . i'd say 10/10 too

Or a wife battered on the daily, but still in the kitchen cookin all the same
Cookin through the pain, theres a way out but is she lookin through the rain


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Good work, cee4
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Post by ..DaGreatest.. »

Straight ill bruh.. had fasho quotables n what not..
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Post by MagicMark »

If u got a 50/50 operation, lifes out ur control, your accounting that on men
Will u wake?, minds slippin, what u thinkin when ur counting back from 10
Ur religious and ur kid is dead, do u forgive the killer n accept that its fate
Does it make u question the faith, if no is it a sin to want vengeance n hate

^ hot shit

multis where used effectively, topic was cool, flow solid.. great piece, only complaint is there want more of it lol
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illest lyrics.
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Post by Cee4 »

thanks for all the feed on this. i will return the favour just kinda busy right now
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Post by precise »

this was excellent man

Or a wife battered on the daily, but still in the kitchen cookin all the same
Cookin through the pain, theres a way out but is she lookin through the rain
Ur tryna inject but u cant find a vein, do you still get pleasure from the buzz
Under pressure for a buck, could OD, knowin the wrong measure n ur fucked

that part was pretty sick, double meanings n whatnot in there

good job dude, enjoyed readin it
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