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Neva Sweat a Cat

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My Fingaz Aint Stop Rollin i Ain ( Get-a-Flat)
Im Pitchin Bagz Son i'll ( Let-Ya-Bat)
Wen it Comez 2 Statz Wut You Betta-At?!
Nothin! ima T Shirt Mag i Ain Neva SWEAT-A-CAT../
Da Teamz Bac u Ain Get da Memo-Cat We-Punishin
i'll Bring ya "Camp Pain" Like Democrat,Republikin!!!/
Keep Thinkin ya Hustlez On lock Wit ya Grizzle-Shacklez..
Till u Get "Stuck Up Here" Like a Little-Rascal!!/
Yall Sum Actaz ya "Click-Back-On"
U N ya Homiez Clickin Till i Go "CLICK-CLACK-GONE!"/
I Flip (Solez,Cellz) Know Anything a (Soul,Sell)
i "Put INN Work" Like i Wanna Job Atta HOTELL!!!/
U Aint Lettin Off NO-SHELLZ Plus ya Hoe-Smell..
ya Snitch Ass Must Hate I-M Da Way u "GO-TELL"/
Hold Me Down? Na u Cant Give Diz Spazz-a-Latch
Any rappa Wida Grip on da Game Haz-Da-Tach..
Shoe Salezmen Cant "Come Pair" Hazard Cuz He Neva HAZ-A-MATCH!!!/
You Use ya Mouth Alot u OUTTA-BREATH??
Ya Project Aint Shit! Like in Class U GOTTA-F/
U Tried 2 Act Krazy-Well ya Statement Gave Offa Lady-Smell,
Cuz Wen i Hollad U Wuz Quick Ta "GO BACK DOWN" Like u Lef 2 Da A-T-L
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Post by |.R.SON.aLL.| »

..I Thought This Was One Of ya Best Drops ..
Idk I Love That Camp Pain Wordplay ..
First Time I Heard That ..
Everythin Else Was Pretty Good ..
I Mos Deffo Love Tha Piece Man ..
It Was Hot
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.. it`s S.a.W Bitches ..
.. Niggas ain't Fuckin Wit Tha Team ..

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Thanks For Da Feed Homie.. i Deff Got Chu With F.B..
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Yall Sum Actaz ya "Click-Back-On"
U N ya Homiez Clickin Till i Go "CLICK-CLACK-GONE!"/

^^lol..i lyk that line.

ur lyrics are str8t. like the concept and the flow. nice work.
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My Fingaz Aint Stop Rollin i Ain ( Get-a-Flat)
Im Pitchin Bagz Son i'll ( Let-Ya-Bat)
Wen it Comez 2 Statz Wut You Betta-At?!
Nothin! ima T Shirt Mag i Ain Neva SWEAT-A-CAT../
^^^^
not feelin this here. you aint realy sayin much


Da Teamz Bac u Ain Get da Memo-Cat We-Punishin
i'll Bring ya "Camp Pain" Like Democrat,Republikin!!!/
Keep Thinkin ya Hustlez On lock Wit ya Grizzle-Shacklez..
Till u Get "Stuck Up Here" Like a Little-Rascal!!/
^^^^
this section is nice. good flow/punches especially the democrar/republican shit


Yall Sum Actaz ya "Click-Back-On"
U N ya Homiez Clickin Till i Go "CLICK-CLACK-GONE!"/
I Flip (Solez,Cellz) Know Anything a (Soul,Sell)
i "Put INN Work" Like i Wanna Job Atta HOTELL!!!/
U Aint Lettin Off NO-SHELLZ Plus ya Hoe-Smell..
ya Snitch Ass Must Hate I-M Da Way u "GO-TELL"/
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its some hard shit. the whole click clack gun shit aint really believable but its all good lol

Hold Me Down? Na u Cant Give Diz Spazz-a-Latch
Any rappa Wida Grip on da Game Haz-Da-Tach..
Shoe Salezmen Cant "Come Pair" Hazard Cuz He Neva HAZ-A-MATCH!!!/
^^^
not feeling yhis. the come pair shit is real basic wordplay. ur better than that


You Use ya Mouth Alot u OUTTA-BREATH??
Ya Project Aint Shit! Like in Class U GOTTA-F/
^^^^
haha nice punch
U Tried 2 Act Krazy-Well ya Statement Gave Offa Lady-Smell,
Cuz Wen i Hollad U Wuz Quick Ta "GO BACK DOWN" Like u Lef 2 Da A-T-L
^^^^
played out


overall this piece had its ups and downs. some nice punchlines and wordplay some punches that didnt work. your flow has definitly improved since you been foocusing on audio. solid but an average piece from you
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How is Da Click Clack Line Not Believable?
Prolly Cause U Dont Know Wuts Reality With People on Da Net..
But its Believable Out Here.. I Put in Work..
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My Fingaz Aint Stop Rollin i Ain ( Get-a-Flat) < --- Aint Stop Rollin Blunts
Im Pitchin Bagz Son i'll ( Let-Ya-Bat) <-- Pitchin Bags i'll Let ya Cop
Wen it Comez 2 Statz Wut You Betta-At?!
Nothin! ima T Shirt Mag i Ain Neva SWEAT-A-CAT../ < Ima T Shirt Mag Ain Neva "Sweata Cat"
Sweata Catalog...

I Wus Sayin Somethin .
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Post by *.HarleQuin.* »

a real headache to read, u really need to try spelling a bit better
Republikin!!!<< wowzersss

anyway i guess it was good for the played concept u were writing about
actually it was awesome if u put it in that perspective. i agree with cee tho
u arent really saying much, esp if u have to explain your punches

i "Put INN Work" Like i Wanna Job Atta HOTELL!!!//<<i guess that was okay

Till u Get "Stuck Up Here" Like a Little-Rascal!!/
Yall Sum Actaz ya "Click-Back-On"
U N ya Homiez Clickin Till i Go "CLICK-CLACK-GONE!"/ good

i know ur gonna cry and say i sed all this becus i dont like you
but w/e im not gonna lie and say this was hot
regardless of all that..if u dont like it..dont take it
and dont drop a link in my thread anymore
im not gonna come back in here and bitch with u
so thats my word
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Lol 2 Be Honest i Dont Really Care
All Different Feedback is Good.
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Da Teamz Bac u Ain Get da Memo-Cat We-Punishin
i'll Bring ya "Camp Pain" Like Democrat,Republikin!!!/
Keep Thinkin ya Hustlez On lock Wit ya Grizzle-Shacklez..
Till u Get "Stuck Up Here" Like a Little-Rascal!!/

my fav bit i liked this piece was done quite well to me one of your best writtens
nice flow i liked the multies man kepp'em comin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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