Crew static and some bitch

[TakTix]

My mind is crazy like a psyco
So I get my pen and start a flow
Putting words together like a conjuction
Saying shit that makes your brain malfunction
Yeah this is one of my first times
But I aint the type who drop dimes
Unlike Mike that weak ass nigga
He told his moms Al was a drugdeala
He was gonna get fucked up
But I just said he aint worth a buck
Oh and that bitch Claudia whos stuck up
Told her man JoJo that I need to get checked up
But he knows I be lobbing punches
He aint nothing but a punk ass so quit frontin
But I know he cant step up to me
Hes nothing but a lil kid acting like a down G
That wannabe dont wanna talk
I think he wants to get mollywomped
That fucking homo JoJo
Ima beat him to a pulp and watch him die slow
I gotta let him know I put it down
Whenever he talks I laught at that fucking clown
Ima leaving him bleeding like a period
Yeah hes gonna bleed im serious
That little punk calling my cell that bitch
Yeah I fucked Claudia that bitch
Now I see her and my stomach gets sick
Of her ugliness and that bitch is the ugliest
She has no friends or anyone at school
You must be blind and a dumbfuck to be with her fool
But hey its not me so you getting the HIV
And you trippen if you think im the only one pimpin
Her pussy clit and im not the only one fucking with it
So best save your love for another ugly bitch
Im saying this shit to give you some help
Before you end up with warts and an itchy scalp
Full of scabees and best check her shes gotta baby
But you know it aint me who got her pregnant
Im sick of her shes fucking heartless
To let you know you cunt
I rep the westside thug like WHAT!

I wrote this shit after getting toked and decided to share for some feedback aight

[TakTix]

Oh shit I wrote some wrong words was toked out my mind but eh I tried

[8th]

yeah man just stick with it. This is basic stuff, elementary type raps, but thats how EVERYONE starts. Just work on more complex line and using better vocabulary, ya know? and use more multis, it makes it flow better, and makes it better lyrically.

For instance:

My mind is crazy like a psyco
So I get my pen and start a flow

you coulda worded this alot better, and put more into, and def. more multis. such as:

im crazy like a pycho, pick up the pen and write bro,
started a tight-flow, practice more & you might grow...

^just an example. But yeah, like i said, everyone started at the level your at. So just practice. And try to write on different topics. Just write write write, and you'll elevate.

[Invincible]

Thats good advice 8th I couldn't say it any better

[TakTix]

Thanks thats really gonna help for reals ima keep writing till I get carpel tunnel thx for feed

[Ambiguous Realm]

8th mentioned starting.. to be honest i started off with rhymes that u'll only find in cat in the hat and other dr. suess books so if u r starting than its a good start...if u've been at it for a while than u just need to improve.. alot of wat ur saying doesn't really rhyme unless ur pronouncing it wrong lol.. but n e how the example 8th gave u is a considered a multi since he's rhyming two words at a time.. best way to do this is to focus on rhyming syllables

if ur as dedicated as u seem.. add lyrical_ekoms to ur yahoo messenger

btw from experience.. the best way to improve might be to see how other people do it.. and try to do it like them... and then improve to be better than them.. text battles always helps improve ur writing.. especially if ur into violent and insulting writing..try to stay away from using the same rhyming words like up when it comes to writing unless ur going to record and use it for a hook but it still would only work if ur doing crunk

and if ur into crunk then leave that as ur musical preference since most of us at illestlyrics don't enjoy crunk becuz it lacks lyrical content and is mostly used for clubbing

keep practicing tho.. practice DOESN'T make perfect but it sure does help

[precise]

woord

[complexity]

Yah. I agree. Practice/Practice/Practice man.

The more you read the more rhymes you learn and shit. And techniques you learn. After you learn the techniques you can vary them to suit your own style. If you can get a mentor it would help a lot like ekoms persay. But if not just practice/practice/practice. And stay around people that are better then you or at least at your level. Because they will make you want to do better and elevate your game. (for instance this site).

[TakTix]

Aight thanx and the stuff i throw in this sight is my first time stuff me and my homie been wanting to rap for awhile just never came across it till one day i decided to follow that dream and now im here and yeah i like that violent shit and all its fucking awesome and ekoms thanx for giving me your time to learn and fuck crunk i hate that shit but ima keep on writing thanx all