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Post by Dead Silence »

not one of ur better tracks. u should take ur time and go a and remix it. echo in ur verse a lil too much from what i can understand anyhow. flow doesnt seem to ride the beat. lyrics are good and on point. all i gotta say is if u want me to give u real feed on it go back and re mix it and than post it.
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Post by Dead Silence »

yeah that suxlol thats why i save pretty much all of my shit now just in case ihave to do that or wanna make a remix of it or w.e lol just in case
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Post by Omega Bill »

Lyrics were nice.
Flow was nice, one or two parts where flow was kinda lost but you picked it back.
You didnt seem to ride the beat, or it was off by a little bit.

You should make this is a whole track with a few verses. You spit well to this.
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Post by *.HarleQuin.* »

mac ill leave u feed when i get back home, im in class right now
and i dont think my proffesor likes 'black music' : / lol
dont think i left bill and dead silence feed and not u
i got u later!
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Post by *.HarleQuin.* »

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umm lol the only part i liked was jay-z
u were really off, but ur lyrics woulda been
put to good use if the flow was on point
too short..i think a second or third verse
would have helped u rise to occasion
i like the clock out line
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Post by Kurse »

The Good Stuff:

-On paper it seems to be a very solid verse. Few punches...can't complain.
-You even said urself...ur experimenting with something you don't normally do (punch-line audio), which I like...I think it says alot about an artist when their willing to go into uncharted waters.

What can use improvement:

-I dunno if an effect that you put on ur voice, ur microphone or what...but I just don't like it. (It's not the echo...it's hard to say what it is)
-You didn't keep your flow in tact with the beat. You just kinda spilled your words out...kinda like as if you got carried away reading ur verse instead of spittin it!
-One of my pet peeves...when someone uses a beat...and there's more instrumental than verse! Not gooooood!!!

Honestly I'd have to give it a 5/10...I think this could've been executed better...especially for a diss track. But keep tryin and doin ur thang pimp.
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Post by Momeijah »

That Would Be a Complicated Beat To Flow On, u Did Good Though, Fell Off a Couple Of Times Spitting Too Fast, But it Was Good. Actually Not as Good as Some Other Stuff ive Heard From u, intro Was a Bit Long But as Far as Lyrics And Delivery Were Concerned it Was Dope, Mic Presence Was There. Definitely Don't Use So Much Echo in ur Next Track Though Haha.
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Post by HKX »

I agree wit kurse on dis one dawg shit is good tho 4 an audio i think if u worked more on ur audio's you'd be straight u should free 2 beats dat would help u ride da beat a lot and practice it like 2-3 times b4 u lay it down see if it sounds good 2 u not bad tho keep it up wit da audio's nigga
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