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Help The Youth Through Everything tough and the Painfull years//
Everyone Doesnt Relize The Pain We Shed in Our Tears //
Parents arent there so they listen to freinds here have a couple of beers//
On The way Home put the car into deadley Gears with His mates//
And we hear the schreech Oh the tyres were the car goes stright through the gates//
They have too go Home and tell What happend that night Too there Parents//
They Dont Care About there Well Being They Just give us Facial Exspressions//
You cant sleep For minutes Hours and Seconds Wishin id die Thats the onli opition i got left in my life//
So U pull out A gun that Your parents didint no about Before you pull it U give A Scared Screm
YOur Parents Rush IN too see what happend ANd They wirness a messed upp Kids Susicde sence

But then His Parents wake up * it was a Dream* So That Day They Hugged Him and TOld Him They Loved Him
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wot yall think
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Post by complexity »

ehhhh, a little strange man. I don't think you put your point across right, the concept could be good. You will elevate a lot on this site. And this site might make you one hell of a rapper as you get older. You have so much time.
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Thanks well i was Just board and decided to do somethin quick
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It wasn't bad but you have to pick a perspective and stick with it. I like the whole story line overall it was decent.
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