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Objectional Anticipation

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Now if nothing comes from what I wrote

At least I know I got a good poem :lol:

Now I've been told

there is lots of fish
well obviously but she's
the prettiest note in the symphony

Strait up

She's pretty from the neck up with a minimal amount of makeup
She's not an A cup but a step below C

Got this merman urning for the birds and the "B"s
On the "surface" but it seems
there's a purpose in the "deep"

Conversations thats escaping from the beauty that she breaths

She's intelligent
No if ands or rear ends
makes me wanna switch from swift chats
to dear friends
Maybe take a chance to grip hands
and share trends

Turn this subtle glance to a stare dance
my lens
comprehends the tango
as we tangle through these deep looks

Trying to turn this fable to more than ink in my think book

I may seem shook

But I'm not
I'm deep in thought
It's seeming odd between your bod
and no facades
It's like the gods composed the odds
to get even with
even if
some obstacles seem untoppable
I feel its possible

And almost unstoppable when I peer into those optical s
So not to boast or pose a dose of machination

But I wouldn't of wrote this if there wasn't a hint
of reciprocation

flirtation

is one of the best medications
When the dosages are exchanged in equal coordination

so now I'm waiting
patiently awaiting the next conversation
with the tiniest hint

of anticipation.
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Post by Anomolus »

the imagery in this piece is like... wow, for real that's all I can say.

It has everything!... What I like the most is that, you're able to take me right to the feeling you were feeling at the time haha, I guess that's how I would explain it.

anyways, very good. and keep it up!
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Post by Brah-Vo »

Probably one of the dopest poems ive ever read
Drop this in distilled concepts.
Imagery was dope.
Lovin the structure too, very unique for a poem.
Great vocab and everything.
This was just awesome all round.
Your more of a poet then a rapper IMO.
Keep droppin my dude
Aka Raiza Sharp, R.A.I
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