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-TraMaTiK-
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brenda's gotta baby

Post by -TraMaTiK- »

as promised heres my version of it,i recorded it this mornin,excuse the few lil pops that are in there nothin major but im juz lettin u kno ahead of time,i personally think its ok i prolly cudda done a better job but for now heres my version.

http://soundclick.com/share?songid=6303862
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Yo i'ma get to this as soon as i can....i want to spit a verse two....then i got a hook for it....good ass shit...i liked the flow...you got a ICP kinda sound though wit ya voice lol
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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

i dont know where the icp factor comes in but... it started choppy and ended choppy there wasnt much emotion in this, i think the verse was too long for you it jus soundin like u died off at the end.. lyrics were solid i read them first and had high hopes for this drop man. i think wit a lil more practice wit it it could be a lot better
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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

~Symbolikull~ wrote:i dont know where the icp factor comes in but... it started choppy and ended choppy there wasnt much emotion in this, i think the verse was too long for you it jus soundin like u died off at the end.. lyrics were solid i read them first and had high hopes for this drop man. i think wit a lil more practice wit it it could be a lot better
yea i gotta agree with u there man^,it was long but it wuz a challenge in my eyes.gotta have some versitilty even if it takes a while 2 obtain it..im prollyyy gonna re do this when i have time cuz i believe i cud of added more emotion into it as well,but thanks 4 the feed both of u
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Post by Omega Bill »

Baw. Man you NEED more emotion in your audios. Verse was written so well in the Scrips, and to be completely blunt, dont take offense, it seemed like you half assed it. Half way through you came off as if you were bored and were just waitin till you could stop.

In all honesty, it wasn't bad, but from your last drop to this was actually a step back. I can picture you just sitting there reading this. When I rap my verses out loud, my hands are all over the place, try to get into it. If I get a mic I'll show you how I do it, I may sound like shit possibly, not sure what others think, but I got the swagger and cockyness to make it seem better than it is, lmao.

You said you're gonna re-do it, and I hope you do. I know you coulda did a lot better, YOU know you coulda did a lot better.
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