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Arvincible
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Post by Arvincible »

When i Say Andre Kirlenko i'm Talkin Bout AK'z Aimed At Ya Head
Banana Clips Always Locked i'll Leave Ya Tamed Wit Tha Lead

That was my fave bar my dude, that Basketball punch was niice
This was an okay drop compared to the ones you put more time into (duh)
but for a quick key this was pretty smooth in structure, and not exactly a direct hit on the flow, but its decent mang..
keep up the consistent work
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Post by Brah-Vo »

Yo homie,
this was a dope lil piece right here


You got the multies:

These Bitin Snaggle Toothed Niggaz Needa Start Cleanin They Teeth
When i Make it Ta Tha Top i'ma Bring My Regime From Beneath

And u got the wordplay:

When i Say Andre Kirlenko i'm Talkin Bout AK'z Aimed At Ya Head
Banana Clips Always Locked i'll Leave Ya Tamed Wit Tha Lead

^^^ Dopest bar.

The flow was on point, topic was iight, just another TGYH topic but hey i aint complainin, it's koo.

One of your best pieces imo .. But u gotta start posting longer ones :D lmao.
Good shit fam.
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Post by Omega Bill »

Kinda Like Police it's A Fact My Bars Cleanin Tha Streets
it's Like i'm Addicted Ta Crack But i'm Only Feinin Fa Beats


Good shit man. For a quick key it flowed on point. Only problem I saw, and it wasnt often, but a line would seem like a filler "i Bring Bigga Llamas Then You See in Tha Movies
Ya Sing About Nigga Problems Cuz You Cant Eat With Tha Goons B" No offense it just looked like a filler line while the rest of the drop was hot.

You gotta start droppin long ass pieces man, lol. But while you stick with the shorts, they're still good.
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Post by Haz »

i Aint Cass But Ya'll Niggas Can Still Ask About Me
i Rock A Black Mask An Beg Ya Ass Ta Doubt Me
i Keep Lookin Fa Beef Cuz i'm Starvin Niggaz
i'm Harmin Niggaz My Fingaz Carvin Triggaz
Cant Ride Wit Tha Team it's Fact Ya Cant See Us
i'll Leave Ya Holy Like My Gats Strapped Ta Tha Man Jesus




Kinda Like Police it's A Fact My Bars Cleanin Tha Streets
it's Like i'm Addicted Ta Crack But i'm Only Feinin Fa Beats
These Bitin Snaggle Toothed Niggaz Needa Start Cleanin They Teeth
When i Make it Ta Tha Top i'ma Bring My Regime From Beneath

Those two Sections wus Smooth as Hell, Snappy Punches..

& u Got On sum Real Gangsta Shit Dis Wusnt a ( Raiza Sharp Piece)

Good shit Niggah.. are Crew Gotta Do a Collab.. Well Me & u Do cus We're active..
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Post by Brah-Vo »

^^lmfao funny cunt hazard.

Yeh, fuck off.

(Raiza Sharpe piece) lmfao.
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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

after all the bullshit... nice verse 3.5/5
i'll smack yuh with rage i force multis outta my ass to the page
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