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[psych-tech]

I can tell that your angry, by the puffs and the moans/
How many signs must i give until you leave me alone//

You got me bundled up smothered shut, when do i breathe?/
Its almost like your insults, put my mind at ease//

How long will you poor till i got a half cup/
As much as you cut me down, its only time till im up//

Standing on your high horse but im sporting stilts/
while you were planting brain ninja's i was layin the guilts//

Not done at all... just wanted some feed, so i can find where im going with this...

[MesaR]

Agreed

this was pretty basic, even though the topic was pretty good, and you executed it alright.

way to short, good that's its not done though.

I can tell that your angry, by the puffs and the moans/
How many signs must i give until you leave me alone//

Alright, Got your msg across straight away, basic.

You got me bundled up smothered shut, when do i breathe?/
Its almost like your insults, put my mind at ease//

lol pretty nice, rhymeschme here is simple but i sore were you were going

How long will you poor till i got a half cup/
As much as you cut me down, its only time till im up//

didnt like this much

Standing on your high horse but im sporting stilts/
while you were planting brain ninja's i was layin the guilts//

ok finish .

overall this was alright abit basic uppin