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Ultra Violence - The Saga Vol. 1: The Girl Next Door.

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Learning To Live With People is The Direction-Of-Life ..||
But Fuck That id Rather Cause Hell With Aggression-And-Spite ..||
All We Exchanged Was a Smile When We Crossed-Paths ..||
And u Could Easily Tell That She Was Running From a Lost-Past ..||
Well She'd Never Expect-This, u See i Started This Check-List ..||
Of Who i Wanted To Rape, Beat, Kick And Jack Their Necklace ..||
Some Call Me Reckless, But it Made Sense-To-Me ..||
The Perfect Night - Killing The Stupid Whore That Lived Next-To-Me ..||
She Had a Daughter Too, i Never Knew Her Age But i Would Guess-Sixteen ..||
Maybe i Should Rape Her Too, She Was Young, Hot, Fresh-And-Clean ..||
On Saturday Night, Me And The Crew Had a Little-Meeting ..||
Was it Gnna Be Easy? Or Was She Gnna Start Kicking,-Screaming? ..||
Because Those Noises im Sick-Of-Hearing, But Fuck it, Fun-is-Fun ..||
So We Made Our Way Over There Screaming 'Run-Bitch-Run!' ..||
Broke in The House, She Was On The Couch, We Tipped-it-Over ..||
My Two Guys Held Her Down, Then i Started To Kick-Her-Shoulder ..||
'Does This Glove Smell Like Chloroform?' Nah Fuck That, i Want-Her-Awake ..||
After id Slapped Her About Some, i Rubbed My Cock-in-Her-Face ..||
My Other Dude Was Upstairs Giving Her Daughter-a-Chase ..||
He Cornered Her Pretty Fast, So Then He Caught-Her-Then-Raped ..||
Her Fucking Lolita Brains Out, This Was Now The House-Of-Screams ..||
2 Chicks, And 4 Dudes Who'd Given Up On Their Lousy-Dreams ..||
i Grabbed a Whisk From The Kitchen, u Know The Electric-Kind ..||
Turned The Fucker To Full Power, And Asked The Guys To Get-Behind ..||
i Shoved it Right in Her Ass, Her Screams Could Probably Crack-Stone ..||
Ass Nearly Swallowed The Whisk, Now it Was Close To Her Back-Bone ..||
Pulled it Out, it Was Like She'd Given Birth To a Whisk-Out-Her-Ass ..||
intestines Were Ambylical Chords, i Was So Sick-That-i-Gasped ..||
How The Hell Was She Still Alive? Who Gives a Shit Let's Abuse-Her-More ..||
Cuz it's a Waste Of a Pussy if ur Not Gnna Use-a-Whore! ..||
My Guy Brought Her Daughter Down, i Was Lacing-My-Boot ..||
To Use it For What Though? SILLY! Raping-This-Cooch! ..||
She Had To Watch Her Mother Scream in Pain, My Boot-in-Her-Beaver ..||
My Trousers Covered in Discharge And Blood, Better Than Using-My-Weiner ..||
i Kept On Pushing-Then-'Leave-Her!' i Stopped And Slapped-The-Girl ..||
Spat in Her Face, Gave Her a Cunt Punt Then i Was Grabbing-Her-Curls ..||
Shoved Her Face in Her Mother's Crotch, So Big it Was Like a Sleeping-Bag ..||
Picked Her Back Up, Slapped Her Then Put My Dick in The Weeping-Hag ..||
After Minutes Of Sexy Time, i Decided To Grab-My-Knife ..||
i am THE-MAN-Tonight! Now im Ready To Stab-On-Sight ..||
The Daughter Gasped-in-Fright, i Stuck it in Her Mother's-Throat ..||
Winked at The Girl, Laughed And Said 'i Hope u Loved-The-Show' ..||



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fuckin tre man..LOL it was umm..different?lolll i saw part a this on msn n i wuz laughin 4 some reason but im glad ur tryna be versitile and try new shit..this was definetly sick as in like some ppl wud go 'omg eww' but it cud be worse i suppose..the flow was str8 the whole way thru,pretty good description too gona be a part 2 i assume cuz its Vol. 1?
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Post by Viral »

well besides the topic..it was pretty dope..lol im not one to promote rape so the topic was pretty bogus...but the multis n the way u went about the story was tight...i liked it...LEAVE ME FEED!!!..OR ILL GIVE U HEPATITIS!!!
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Thanks For The Feed All. The Favour Shall Be Returned Tonight.

Yeah ill Be Making Ultra Violence Sequels But They Won't Be The Same Storyline. Think Of The Final Fantasy Games, Every Sequel is a Completely Different Story/World/Characters So Yeah. Also i Called This One 'The Girl Next Door', Another in The Ultra Violence Series Might Be Up as Soon as Tonight Possibly.

Also i Do Not Condone Rape, Making Girls Eat Their Mothers Out, Fucking in The Ass With a Whisk Or Sex With a Minor (Well Maybe Not So Much Sex With a Minor Haha.... Kidding) So if Anyone is Sensitive To This Shit, Take it Tongue-in-Cheek Or Don't Read it at All.
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Post by Glamtrash »

Lmao...well....You certainly have a vivid imagination.....And so do I, which means I just got THE WORST mental picture of all time. Which is a good thing, because it takes talent to make someone see something.

Well written from beginning to end. As fucked up and visually repulsing as it is, it's a good piece.
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Double.FL wrote:Lmao...well....You certainly have a vivid imagination.....And so do I, which means I just got THE WORST mental picture of all time. Which is a good thing, because it takes talent to make someone see something.

Well written from beginning to end. As fucked up and visually repulsing as it is, it's a good piece.
i Never Thought i Wrote it That Graphical. Ah Well Can't Complain if Y'all Are Getting Mental images From it. The Sequel Will Be More Graphic (Similies And Whatnot).

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Overall Rating: 9/10

Only reason I didn't go as far as to sayin it was a perfect 10 is because there were a few lines that seemed either forced or not written out to the best of their capability. For Example:

How The Hell Was She Still Alive? Who Gives a Shit Let's Abuse-Her-More ..||
Cuz it's a Waste Of a Pussy if ur Not Gnna Use-a-Whore! ..||

*The first line was slick...but the second line seemed either a lil short or not as strong as ur capable of doin.

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Broke in The House, She Was On The Couch, We Tipped-it-Over ..||
My Two Guys Held Her Down, Then i Started To Kick-Her-Shoulder ..||

**Probably the weakest bar through the whole verse. Broke in the house, tipped the couch over....cool. But if 2 guys are holding her down...why kick her in the shoulder!? haha I dunno...just was a lil stretched to me. Good lines...just not as strong as the rest of the verse. But that's the thing about every verse that's ever written...there'll always be the strongest bar and there'll always be a weak bar.

That's what I like about Domino and why Illest wouldn't be Illest without him either...he's not afraid to touch real racy topics and say the things that other soft-ass marshmellow artists are too afraid to even consider saying on the record. A very serious and deranged concept...but bold enough for me to appreciate the wandering of te topic. If I had to choose the strongest bar outta this whole piece (which is gonna be hard cuz there actually is alot)...I'd have to go with:

Her Fucking Lolita Brains Out, This Was Now The House-Of-Screams ..||
2 Chicks, And 4 Dudes Who'd Given Up On Their Lousy-Dreams ..||

***Kinda simple...but perfect. Definately descibes the state of mind of the rapist. Addition parts that I found humorous was using the terms "cunt punt" and "sexy-time" in such an aggressive piece. Granted when ur tryin to be serious, you don't wanna let off the aggression in this type of verse...but it was twisted enough to fit and the ending bar...el perfecto!!! Definately wondering what the sequal to this drop would be like. haha
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Word. With Those Bars i Couldn't Think Of Any Decent Rhymes That Were Related To The 1st Line, So i Decided To Go With The Best Ones That Made Sense, Lazy i Know But Meh Lol. Thanks For The Detailed Feed, And Yeah i Do Have a Sequel in The Works, it's All Planned And ive Written Down The Plot And What Sickening Methods Will Be Used, Not Giving Too Much Away Though Haha. Only Reason ive Not Came Around To Writing it Yet is Because ive Started Writing a Few Pieces, All Of Them Will Be Dropped When im Not Too Lazy To Finish Them Haha. But Word, Compared To This...... The Sequel is Gnna Be a LOT More Graphical, With Loads Of Similies Etc To Make The Realest Feeling Shit i Can Write.
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