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I was Sleepin Last Night And Got Glimpses of a Head Pimp Handin Me a Hoe Wit a Chain Like Pimp This
"Slap her up, lap Dat slut around the block till her ass is fuck'd and profit is precisely adding up"/

What if She Get Outta Hand, And Complains like She Dont Want Dick And Money Outt a Man
"youngin then she takin money out- ya- hand gotta be bout it fam make her house a damn/

I Aint Tryna Knock This hoe But Shes Collapsin Are Foundations At Her own Down Town Station
"go To her house Knock down the foundations And Collaspe the Crib kidnap her seed then Stab the kid"/

Nah im A Money Makah Not a Killa, Nothings Worth You Bein Labeled And Copz tryna Stop ya Scrilla
"why you so worried you asked what if anyways who gives a fuck bitch hoes suck at life and suck dick"/

I Kno No Love is Shown,Costyz Can Drug ha Homez,Beat da Bitch Den Choke ha Wit a Rug they Own
"true as long as they pay you its a money all day-veiw, u get money dey get blown like a yay cue"/
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Post by Brah-Vo »

Man that was pretty sick. But ya structure gotta change bro. I was abit confused coz your lines are so long. But lyrically it was straight

Good job .
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Aiight i'll Try And Remember Dat Thanks For da Feed i'll Drop Feed on somethin of Urs..
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word hazard .. this was pretty nice some nice rhyme scheme in there, you changed your structure would automacally gives it more of a tight flow.. concept was this was straight..let me break it down

was Sleepin Last Night And Got Glimpses of a Head Pimp Handin Me a Hoe Wit a Chain Like Pimp This
"Slap her up, lap Dat slut around the block till her ass is fuck'd and profit is precisely adding up"/

alright, abit hard to picture the way you worded it but still a good ending.

What if She Get Outta Hand, And Complains like She Dont Want Dick And Money Outt a Man
"youngin then she takin money out- ya- hand gotta be bout it fam make her house a damn/

thought this was dope, the best bar in your drop imo

I Aint Tryna Knock This hoe But Shes Collapsin Are Foundations At Her own Down Town Station
"go To her house Knock down the foundations And Collaspe the Crib kidnap her seed then Stab the kid"/

straight play on words, could have been hit harder though.

Nah im A Money Makah Not a Killa, Nothings Worth You Bein Labeled And Copz tryna Stop ya Scrilla
"why you so worried you asked what if anyways who gives a fuck bitch hoes suck at life and suck dick"/

Nah.. didnt like this bar much dude. way to basic

I Kno No Love is Shown,Costyz Can Drug ha Homez,Beat da Bitch Den Choke ha Wit a Rug they Own
"true as long as they pay you its a money all day-veiw, u get money dey get blown like a yay cue"/

whats a yay cue? ill leave feed for this bar after i understand it better..

overall this was good.. had some nice bars.. ya flow increased remarkably
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..Fuck that gay shit you say on a beat..
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Good Lookin Out For The Feed My Niggahz..
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