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I'm chokin upp
Starin at the haZe while its brokin up
Open dutch
Sayin fill me up like I'm at the puMp
Dreams of purple kush..an that sour deisel
Can't think of a better way for me 2 greet my people
Com an Meet my people
Brooklyn 7-1-8
Where white widow is allways good
But it aint better then the grapes
An iF its dRo I want mO
Stuff it till it can't clOse
Soo much smoke its clogin up the ozone
Home grown..cali kush..lemme get a fuckin bush
G13
ak-47
But the bKay haZe is like buDs grown in heaVen
I'm smokin up the streets
Soo the blunts rolled an reving
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Post by MesaR »

the topic name you used really had nothing to do with what you were writing on anyway.
unless your love is guns brooklyn petrol pumps and smoking blunts.. and make ur bars the same length

you really should stop using fillers between each bar..it just wrecks the flow

ill brake it down ..

I'm chokin upp
Starin at the haZe while its broke up

^ noo choke and broke rhyme, but not up and up < bad flow.


Dreams of purple kush..an that sour deisel
Can't think of a better way for me 2 greet my people

^^ ugh i dont get this bar


An iF its dRo I want mO
Stuff it till it can't clOse
Soo much smoke its clogin up the ozone

first and second line sucked.
last line was straight..


But the bKay haZe is like buDs grown in heaVen
I'm smokin up the streets
Soo the blunts rolled an reving

^ not feeling it man..

topic was sorta played out talking about a bunch of bullshit.
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..Fuck that gay shit you say on a beat..
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I didn't say 1 thing about gunz my man...I'm talkin about the haze in brooklyn..that's my love..ak 14 is a type of weed...see u guys got soo much critisizm an don't even kno wat ur talkin about..

An I'm talkin about fillin my blunt when I'm sayin I'm waitin at the pump sayin fill me up..
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u Give Weed-Smokers a Bad Name.
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AKA SCOTCH HALL, MOE MEIJER & MOMEIJAH.
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Post by Cee4 »

white widow is the shit. people talk shit and say your gettin white widow and ak 47 when its really just homegrown. u need to go to Amsterdam to try the real stuff lol

anyway the piece was alright. nothin special but ok if it was a freestyle
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Post by Haz »

I'm chokin upp
Starin at the haZe while its brokin up
Open dutch
Sayin fill me up like I'm at the puMp


lol Dat Shit Wuz Funny.. i Liked Wudd ya Topic wus..
Dis Drop Wus Good
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Post by кℓαѕѕιιcк »

LOL I read this last night

i didnt think i read it right

so i read it again

AND FUCK THIS IZ FUNNY

iight im sorry man
U know when i read the title i thought..."hmm could be gud"

but didnt have much of a relavance
unless as sequence said
"if smoking Bluntz and Gas Pumps iz ya love"

its iight..keep practisin man__as i say with Sex"PRACTISE MAKES PERFECT"!!
do ya thng..
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