When All Falls Apart Full Version

[B-Bear]

Here's the full version, ignore the errors and change of voice at the end of the second and third verse - that has been handled, just haven't got that file right now.. Anyhow, here it is

[Dead Silence]

nice dude

ur flow is really good i like how u went fast with this beat it seems to really match it really well
the beat is pretty good
the chorus is really good i like the singin in it,its relly catchy
ur lyrics are really good sumtin that i wouldnt expect from you

good job fam keep it up

overall 9/10

[B-Bear]

I don't think it's that good myself tho..

My firs ever recorded song, so the quality, delivery could be a lot better.. but everybody gotta start somewhere right? And the sound quality could be much better, but it has all been recorded in an amater studio, so we had some problems with the mic (therefore the voice problem)

Anyway, thanks for feedback mister.. uppin

[Momeijah]

Enunciate.

The Flow Was Good And For a Track Like This... The Vocal Delivery Was Good.

But u Get Lost in Some Of ur Words Like ur Tryin To Spit Em Too Fast And That Can Ruin The Rhyming. Make Sure All ur Words Are Clear And They Don't Turn To Mumbles On The Second Syllable.

i Was Feeling The Beat And Lyrics, Work On The Little Problem i Mentioned And Word.

[B-Bear]

Yeah, I'm very aware of that!

And I appreciate u takin time to leave feedback, I'll hopefully do much better next time..

[Kurse]

It's not bad for it being ur first audio. Beat was nice...I give it a 7.5/10...maybe an 8
But your flow sounds too rushed. Like at parts you ride the beat..and others you don't. And that's due to jumping into the next bar too soon. If you listen to it...you need to seperate where you spit at certain points. Don't worry about it sounding too "open" at points...that's what ad-libs and voice overs are for, to cover the little gaps.
But enunciation and pronunciation is the key. You never wanna sound like ur trippin over the words cuz that'll make or break you song. Practice your breathing (which also those gaps come real useful for) or record it in a "cut and take" style. You have to find what suits your need and style of presentation. Overall I'd give the track a 6/10 tops.
But keep working at it...at somepoint you'll find the pace that'll sound right and feel comforatable. Just gotta fish around.

[B-Bear]

Thank u, appreciate advices and feedback!

[B-Bear]

Just curios, except from the enunciation, did anyone of u have any problems understanding the lyrics and what i was sayin?

[-TraMaTiK-]

after i peep'd this when u sent this,i was a bit surprised,i liked it for a 1st track it was cool,some of the words were a bit hard 2 understand but once i caught ur flow n how u said things it was fine,chorus as everyone said was cool sung pretty cool..only thing i wud say which ppl told me is,dont try 2 rush 2 many words into ur verse,let it flow nice n easy and be relaxed,spit it from the heart..takes practice we all kno that,but stay@it i give this about a 7/10 for ur first time..pretty cool shit