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Here's a snippet of my first ever recorded track.. i'll be posting the full version as soon as it's finished
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The snippet wasn`t really long enough to get proper feel for the track. But it seemed pretty good. You rode the beat well and i would imagine the lyrics will be on point going by your writtens. Its good to hear someone else doing audio. Look forward to hearin more audio from you
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Post by complexity »

I was very interested to hear this.

You sound a little to robotic.

The lyrics are nice as hell. It's crazy the amount you have elevated lyrically.

You seem to have a nice flow, but something seems to be wrong with the voice.
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I know it's reeeally short.. but wasn't able to cutter only took about 20 sec.. but i'll be finishin the track pretty soon, prolly on thursday, then i'll post it..

My voice sounding robotic.. hmmm... interesting point.. never really considered that.. u thinkin like i gotta put more attitude into my delivery or what?
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you foreign or something?
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
[Killa Sin]

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Post by Mephisto »

Sounds pretty good, you just kinda have trouble saying a few words just gotta perfect your flow. You kinda have that laid back lazy dope sound like mf doom pretty cool. Keep at it.
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drunken jesus wrote:you foreign or something?
I'm a god damn viking dude! from the lands in the north.. i'm from norway.. lol
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damn all this time i thought you was a corny white dude turns out you're a corny viking

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main problem is your enunciation you kinda slur words together delivery and shit was straight just work on your enunciation so you saying all the words clearly
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
[Killa Sin]

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drunken jesus wrote:damn all this time i thought you was a corny white dude turns out you're a corny viking

main problem is your enunciation you kinda slur words together delivery and shit was straight just work on your enunciation so you saying all the words clearly
Gotta love the picture!

Yeah, I feel like i'm mumbling in some parts.. together with the enunciation.. but i gotta say, no braggin or nothin.. but for being a norwegian dude, i feel like i got a pretty straight pronuncaition.. it's better then A LOT of others..
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