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Ok im Sure Yall Know ive Been Slacking Recently, Because ive Been Busy With Other Shit, Starting College Soon And Everything's Going Great in My Life Right Now So i Haven't Really Had Much Fuel To The Fire. However, After Months Of Listening To Heavy Metal And Dropping Shit im Not at All impressed With; ive Written This. Donno How i Started it, But i Was Really in The Mood (This Was Like 15 Minutes Ago When i Started Writing it, So Yah it's a 15 Minute Piece) But it's Pretty Complex. Talks About Why ive Been Slacking, Some Punches, What's Been Happening On illest, Some Babbling, a Little Of Everything. So Yeah... Hopefully im Back On Track?


i Got Bored Of Writing Months Ago, i Wasn't Really Up-For-it,
Too Lazy To Drop Or Battle, Basically id Had Enough-Of-it.

am i Passed-This Rap-Shit? Can't Surpass-This, That's-it?
ill Recast My Magic, it's Time For Drastic-Actions.
Ok, Life's Been Happy, And ive Been Droppin-Some-Wack-Shit,
But Now im Back With Tactics u Can't Stop-The-Attacks-Bitch.
Soon ill Be Battling-insane, Rivals Not Handling-The-Pain,
Most Of Y'all Can't Even Hold a Candle-To-My-Name.
it's The Vandal-in-My-Brain, Y'all Are Asking-To-Be-Sprayed,
Waitin For Me To Strike Like Y'all Are Masochistic-Lames.
ur Wack-Simplistic-Ways Making Me Laugh-And-Pick-My-Brain,
Like 'What's That Faggot-Shit-He's-Sayin? Can't Understand-The-Spits-He's-Lame.'
ive Seen More Swagger in a Paraplegic African-With-Aids.
Oh im Bad? ive ALREADY WROTE HALF-The-Shit-u-Say,
ive Elevated More Than Sales Of Plastic-Dicks-in-Maine. (Lol @ Plex)
im a Master-in-The-Game, And i Ain't Even Tryin-Here,
But Still i Got u 'Dicks On Lock' Just Like The Eyes-Of-Queers.
This Ain't a Punchline Piece, it's a Babbling-Piece!
u Wnna See Punchlines? Wait Till im Battling-Peeps.
For a While i Lost The Passion For Rapping, That's-it,
Pretty Simple, Y'all Were Lucky To See a Fraction-Of-Madness.
But Domino's Back Bitch! Antagonistic To illest Lyrics,
No, My Life Hasn't Gone Downhill, im Always Lifting My Spirits.
im Just Filling The Missing-Piece, Now Prepare To Be Sick-Of-Me,
Most Of Y'all Need To BITE Or Lose ur BARK Like a Brittle-Tree.
Yeah.. Basically im Saying, Most Of These Bitches-Need-Flamed,
Been Outta Action a While, But Now im Sick-Of-These-Lames.
in a Nutshell, Sorry For Leavin Y'all, im Leadin a Busy-Life,
But Before i Get Lazy im Bringin illest To Dizzy-Heights!


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But Domino's Back Bitch! Antagonistic To illest Lyrics,
No, My Life Hasn't Gone Downhill, im Always Lifting My Spirits

my favorite bar..i juz felt it alot
overall i believe it was a sick piece liked it alot tre..8.5/10
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Thanks For The Feed Guy, ill Return The Favour in a Sec.

Lol @ ur Sig.
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The Multiemaniac is back..

Dude, I've never read a piece with that many multies.. ever.. it almost touched me.. lol

But oonce again, just a babble.. haha.. honestly i love readin your verses, but u know what i'm gon say right now.. but it's more focused then your other drops tho.. but keep it up.. and don't ruin your life again now.. lol
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Thanks For The Feed Dude Lol.
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ur Wack-Simplistic-Ways Making Me Laugh-And-Pick-My-Brain,
Like 'What's That Faggot-Shit-He's-Sayin? Can't Understand-The-Spits-He's-Lame.'
ive Seen More Swagger in a Paraplegic African-With-Aids.
Oh im Bad? ive ALREADY WROTE HALF-The-Shit-u-Say,

These were my favorite bars. It reminds me of sumthin I would say. lol A shining of true brilliance once again from the young Domino. You should've never stopped droppin kid...the shit is sick. But you can tell there's alot of truth in this shit too. Illest has come home to quite a few lame emcees/textcee's and alot of us vets who really made illest a name have been sitting on our asses on mental-vacation too long. I think it's time to show the newbs how it's done and set the bar again.
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Domino, you're British, right...? That would explain why some of the rhyming words have an awkward feel to them. In any case, I liked this. I can't stress enough though how much I think you should be writing longer pieces. This was great and if it were four times the length, I would've really enjoyed reading the whole thing.

If you're really back in the game, then focus your energy into longer pieces, with a more serious attitude. Pieces like this are great, but I think you should add more to it. Take it seriously. Write hooks. Play with different flows. Elevate. You can truly elevate and I'd love to bear witness.
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134282 wrote:Domino, you're British, right...? That would explain why some of the rhyming words have an awkward feel to them. In any case, I liked this. I can't stress enough though how much I think you should be writing longer pieces. This was great and if it were four times the length, I would've really enjoyed reading the whole thing.

If you're really back in the game, then focus your energy into longer pieces, with a more serious attitude. Pieces like this are great, but I think you should add more to it. Take it seriously. Write hooks. Play with different flows. Elevate. You can truly elevate and I'd love to bear witness.
Yeah i am British i Usually Have To Remind Ppl That i am With Like Every Drop Lol. This Drop Wasn't Planned at All, i Just Started Writing And it Was Easier Than Before So i Figured id Just Keep Writing And Make The Most Of it Lol, i Did Run Outta Steam at The End Though. im Just Gettin The Pendulum Movin Right Now i Never Expected To Be On My A Game Right Now But ill Definitely Keep Dropping Serious Shit Until im Back On My A-Game, Also Thanks For The Feed.
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134282 wrote:Domino, you're British, right...? That would explain why some of the rhyming words have an awkward feel to them. In any case, I liked this. I can't stress enough though how much I think you should be writing longer pieces. This was great and if it were four times the length, I would've really enjoyed reading the whole thing.

If you're really back in the game, then focus your energy into longer pieces, with a more serious attitude. Pieces like this are great, but I think you should add more to it. Take it seriously. Write hooks. Play with different flows. Elevate. You can truly elevate and I'd love to bear witness.
Imo, Its Much Harder To Write A Massive Glory Piece Than It Is To Write A Topical. I Think This Is Probably The Right Length For What He Was Trying To Do. On The Other Hand, You Couldve Written A Better Piece By Using The Story Of Changing Your Music Preferences. But None The Less Fam, Still An Alright Piece. Keep Droppin Fam.
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134282 wrote:Domino, you're British, right...? That would explain why some of the rhyming words have an awkward feel to them. In any case, I liked this. I can't stress enough though how much I think you should be writing longer pieces. This was great and if it were four times the length, I would've really enjoyed reading the whole thing.

If you're really back in the game, then focus your energy into longer pieces, with a more serious attitude. Pieces like this are great, but I think you should add more to it. Take it seriously. Write hooks. Play with different flows. Elevate. You can truly elevate and I'd love to bear witness.
Imo, Its Much Harder To Write A Massive Glory Piece Than It Is To Write A Topical. I Think This Is Probably The Right Length For What He Was Trying To Do. On The Other Hand, You Couldve Written A Better Piece By Using The Story Of Changing Your Music Preferences. But None The Less Fam, Still An Alright Piece. Keep Droppin Fam.
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