Gods Hell; My Version; Where I Stand #10

[complexity]

I draft lyrics; I don't write gospels; that shits primitive
like fossils; in the times we livin in, only god knows
why a discriminative colossal, of awful images is infinite
the bible was written in the infant; most limited stages
of our existence, its outrageous that we still listen
it should enrage us; that this contagious fiction
wants to prison us; and make you pray with Christians
thats what religion does, its an evil dictatorship
theirs no way of escaping it, it makes me sick
imagine the men translating, this ancient script
from Greek To English; mistakes in every page in it
some shady shit; kinda like the catholic priests
having sex with your kids; but this master piece
claims they can be forgived, and clappin heat
to murder cats is fine, just dont commit blasphemy
drink the wine, and thank him, for every tragedy
don't matter g, you can be blind, thats just a mistake
in his intelligent design, wait until you die, isn't it great?
think what Jesus would do with every decision you make
sounds riveting, hey, not really! it proves religion is gay
I have one life to live and I wont give it away
besides to my wife n kids, I have the wisdom to say
I would rather be decayed in a grave then living this way

you hypocrites with a Jesus piece need to pipe shit down
that ice on your neck, is wound to tight around
cuz what you write just sounds, dumb you're not nice
at all chump, your a righteous clown who "fronts"

[134282]

Oh, look - 'Plex is back...!

'Plex, you should know that someone hijacked your account. Posted some nonsense in another thread and tried to call it a verse. I'm glad you're back. This is the 'Plexie-kins I'm used to.

I liked this verse. I had to read it twice to really find the "complexity" (no pun intended) in the rhyme scheme. Great stuff. Great topic, great spin on the original version, great lines, great rhyme scheme(s), and only a little bit of filler. If I have to pick something about which to complain, I choose the closing line. Never - ever - use filler in your closing line. Your opening bar and your closing line should always be on fire. Always. No exceptions.

Any plans to record this...?

[Street Pharmacist]

lol good shit plex,kinda deep i got lost some where had it read twice like this guy ^^ i give it a 7/10
keep it up.



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of our existence, its outrageous that we still listen
it should enrage us; that this contagious fiction
wants to prison us; and make you pray with Christians
thats what religion does, its an evil dictatorship
theirs no way of escaping it, it makes me sick
imagine the men translating, this ancient script
from Greek To English; mistakes in every page in it

real shit.

[complexity]

Thanks a lot. I fixed up the ending a little bit.

I doubt, I'll record it, but I did write it to a beat, so it's optional.

[SlickMex]

I got the complex of this right of the bat..Drops like this make you my favorite textcee to read..

Fav part where it thought it took off..
wants to prison us; and make you pray with Christians
thats what religion does, its an evil dictatorship
theirs no way of escaping it, it makes me sick
imagine the men translating, this ancient script
from Greek To English; mistakes in every page in it

[drunken jesus]

where you stand? you don't even stand in the bathroom when you piss you lispy freak

[Dead Silence]

nice dude i like it