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CHINO
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The Pain Is Over

Post by CHINO »

yet again an old post of mine from another site...

sever all ties binding rewinding the past
prior to slit wrists and shards of glass
a portrait in a frame turned to be the death of me
two souls united acted as a suicidal destiny
picture of perfection still drawn with many flaws erased
a edited cut of film scenes of violence were replaced
you never saw the directors cut simply a version rated
the truth requires parental guidance due to graphic hatred
many conflicts ended with bruises and me sayin that I love you
now I'm bleedin on the floor and still all I can say is that I love you
may satan show mercy on me as I bleed through the cracks of hell
my soul in eternal fire the scars on my wrist will swell
they're just another painful memory of the love that you and I shared
when times went bad how I would over react yet you and I still cared
it was this love that was eventually be my final demise
I loved you so much I couldn't stand the tears in your eyes
and knowing I was the cause I could put a stop to your pain
contimplated squeezin a trigger with one shot through my brain
but I figured I would die slow with pain by the glass in my veins
so perhaps we reincarnate the past and without me and ya happiness remains
know that I love and that's the only reason that I did this
who would've guessed to end your pain all we needed was me with slit wrists
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Post by Stina »

damn, i think that was pretty wicked.
the first few lines started to remind me of a book i read
"the picture of Dorian Gray"
which is a pretty sick book.

but yeah, haha anyways, good shit - keep it up :]
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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

i was feelin this the whole way thru..all tho it seemed more like a nice deep verse rather then a poem..but so be it..i loved this bar tho

you never saw the directors cut simply a version rated
the truth requires parental guidance due to graphic hatred

hot shit^

keep droppin man..liked that shit..PeaCe

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Post by Lawgix »

this was wicked dude... nice job... love the words u used in this
Don't Let The Game Make U, Make Urself

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Post by Young K »

That was really good...
Id give it atleast a 9/10...
The feelings were really intense...
Stay up...
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Post by Dead Silence »

i liked ur wordplay in it it was pretty ill
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yup

Post by JackKavorkian »

Im into the Topic, and the Style, along with Depth of Lyrics. Some More multis would have made it Nasty, You did ya thing, i enjoyed reading...no hate.
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