Not Just Another Verse part 2

B-Bear · Post by **B-Bear** » Sat Jun 23, 2007 2:46 am

governments have introduced consitutional racism for decades
crack heads disappear and million ares spent on protectin a leader
values and culture are being smashed to the ground at the zero
the crowning of a hero has turned into a fearsome battle of powers
it shattered the towers and eventually it'll scatter amongst flowers
leading to the planet's destruction cause of these lies and eruptions
and corruption'll be splashed across walls leadin to cries of disruption
bankruption emphasizes the focus of another time of great depression
the expressions of despaired youth is arising at the scene of the crisis
their outher armor disguises the unfair truth in their sallow faces
hollow graces are whispered quietly beggin to escape these horrid places
walkin through torrid mazes burnin their feet from the heat of his sins
feelin a neat peevish wind blowin the strength outta his muscles
the puzzle's comin together and he's able to visualize the picture
realizin that his reality is just another destiny becomin a scripture
he starts to memorize, takes a firm grip around his pen and starts writin...

B-Bear · Post by **B-Bear** » Sat Jun 23, 2007 2:56 am

idol-fallacy-vt5469.html

-TraMaTiK- · Post by **-TraMaTiK-** » Sun Jun 24, 2007 12:26 pm

i liked this piece..it was kool..for some reason tho this bar stuck out..

their outher armor disguises the unfair truth in their sallow faces
hollow graces are whispered quietly beggin to escape these horrid places

good shit^

idk if its how u worded it or what but that was my fav bar..overall good concept id say cuz the gov't always can be picked on or talked about from many views..lol..stay droppin tho..PeaCe

-Tramatik

B-Bear · Post by **B-Bear** » Tue Jun 26, 2007 5:06 am

thank u.. thought it was time to go all political and shit.. lol.. but appreciate feed!!

B-Bear · Post by **B-Bear** » Tue Jun 26, 2007 5:10 am

thank u.. thought it was time to go all political and shit.. lol.. but appreciate feed!!

Gutta · Post by **Gutta** » Tue Jun 26, 2007 6:51 am

ya it was dope, u had a good flow and it was pretty political. any ways it was good stuff. keep it up homie

B-Bear · Post by **B-Bear** » Thu Jun 28, 2007 6:13 am

thanks.. appreciate feedback.. i'll return the favour

B-Bear · Post by **B-Bear** » Mon Jul 02, 2007 2:38 am

Uppin for feedback!

B-Bear · Post by **B-Bear** » Wed Jul 04, 2007 6:36 am

I've had like 75 hits on my drop and only two managed to leave feed.. impressing!!

Young K · Post by **Young K** » Wed Jul 04, 2007 11:02 pm

that was really good lyrics were nice...

what was your aim with this...like how you typed it the last word in the bars sometimes doesnt match the other one...like the rhyme scheme...???

B-Bear · Post by **B-Bear** » Fri Jul 06, 2007 11:02 pm

thanks for feed!

i like the last line to be sort of an ending.. a clever worded sentence.. it doesn't nescessairly have to match the rest of the rhyme scheme in my opipnion.. but good point!!

my aim with this piece was basically to change the perspective of governmental actions into a more personal view..

Young K · Post by **Young K** » Sat Jul 07, 2007 12:24 am

i was just asking cuz i never read anything like that...
but it was good...

B-Bear · Post by **B-Bear** » Sat Jul 07, 2007 7:28 am

KGdaKid wrote:i was just asking cuz i never read anything like that...

In a good or a bad way?

complexity · Post by **complexity** » Sat Jul 07, 2007 7:35 am

Nice vocab and drop.

I liked this one a bit more then the last.

B-Bear · Post by **B-Bear** » Sat Jul 07, 2007 9:11 am

thanks for feedback man! much appreciated

Not Just Another Verse part 2

Not Just Another Verse part 2

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