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Post by complexity »

This was a quick written sorta answering the critics. It's not suppose to be outstanding. It's not suppose to be deep. It's just suppose to be a little rap about some of my criticism. You can read the questions being layed out in my personal chill. I lose the flow about twice in this part and three times in the other drop. The last part was just like a knockout to finish it.

~plex
yo...put yourself in my position
Im an agnostic that acts like a Christian
rap like Im a psychopath
blasting depictions before I even write a track
yes, i work all day and my life is crap
spit poison like I syphon gas
yet hold back when the mic is passed
cuz i want the hype to last
despite the fact, I have no ego
cuz I type a rap, and have a decent flow
people are just shifty and make it believable
the best emcee, not even close
like the moon and the earths distance
see my foes paint a picture thats inconsistent
try to spend less time with the semantics
I do text cuz the illiterates cant understand it
still Im shitty repping sets never candid
Ill admit it, cuz like satellite youll demand it
me and ekoms are still laying it down
but dont test me, ill rock your planet
put my hand behind my back
and lay you down single handed
now its time you rewind the track

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Post by B-Bear »

this was a perplexing drop, alomost thinkin like u tried to write some weak shit.. haven't read the questions on your personal chill yet, but u shouldn't be intimidated or convinced into writing different styles and shit.. in my opinion the best answer u get give to criticism is onw hell of a verse to blow all their doubt away.. but this piece had some nice parts tho

"Im an agnostic that acts like a Christian
rap like Im a psychopath
blasting depictions before I even write a track
yes, i work all day and my life is crap
spit poison like I syphon gas"

that sorta puts the puzzle together..

see my foes paint a picture thats inconsistent
try to spend less time with the semantics
I do text cuz the illiterates cant understand it
still Im shitty repping sets never candid

that's some deep lines right there.. and cleverly written, hope people understand thats shit.. but the endin wasn't so good.. it's okay I guess cause it lies a lot of emotion and frustration in it.. but all in all, it's a straight drop.. keep it up, and rememeber what i said in the beginnin of this post..
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Post by drunken jesus »

you suck at life you lispy freak
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
[Killa Sin]

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Post by MesaR »

Pretty Basic But In A Good Way

Tossed In Some Good Vocab And Decent Flow..

Looks Like Ya Sorta Rushed It A Tad..

Return The Favor . PcE.
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Post by 134282 »

I just got back from the gym and I'm sitting here eating raw tuna fish (gotta have protein within a half hour of a workout). Any way, my screen has all these bits of tuna that flew out of my mouth as I rapped this aloud.

First, some criticism: Don't ever - EVER - post something (now matter how minute) and preface it by pointing out your flaws before anyone has a chance to read it. If I'm trying to hook up with a girl, I don't start the conversation off by telling her I have a small dick. And if you think it's not the best you can be, then why'd you accept it as it is and post it...? Why not go back and revise and keep working on it until it's the best shit you ever wrote in your entire life...? That's the way you should treat every single piece you write. Every single piece. If it's "not suppose to be outstanding", then why bother...? You enjoy settling for mediocre stuff...?

You came off hard in the beginning and were on fire; I liked it. Spit poison like I siphon gas ("siphon" is spelled with an 'i', by the way, not a 'y'). You really came out swinging. Then, half way through, it seemed like you fell off. But the latter part of your verse is much like your name; it has an air of complexity to it. I had to read the whole thing twice before it popped out at me. You completely switched up your style half way through this verse. I'm not so sure that was the best idea in this case, but it shows you're versatile. You have a lot of potential. I think this verse should be the last one you ever post where you preface it by saying "this is okay, but not my best stuff". Fuck that; make every verse your best verse.

I like the reality of this piece. You tell it like it is. You don't get too maudlin with "how much your life sucks", but you touch on it just enough to bring some pain into the picture. Good stuff.

By the way, fuck the critics. If anyone has anything pejorative to say about you or your stee, then you know you're nice because they're flapping their gums because they're just jealous.
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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

unless they really suck then its ok ^ lol

i'm pretty sure i already gave feedback to this.. n e ways i liked it over..

sometimes i do put a crappy topic title.. sometimes cuz i can't think of anything good for it... or if i felt i could've done better but dont feel like fixing it.. its something for me to post n e ways..i think the whole " do ur best and give it ur all" helps alot more when that person is dedicated to wat they're doing.. if they're not then they have little reason to try and i think the biggest reason for using titles as such is so people dont expect too much and end up disappointed but reguardless if its good or bad people will still tell u wat they think
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134282 wrote: First, some criticism: Don't ever - EVER - post something (now matter how minute) and preface it by pointing out your flaws before anyone has a chance to read it. If I'm trying to hook up with a girl, I don't start the conversation off by telling her I have a small dick. And if you think it's not the best you can be, then why'd you accept it as it is and post it...? Why not go back and revise and keep working on it until it's the best shit you ever wrote in your entire life...? That's the way you should treat every single piece you write. Every single piece. If it's "not suppose to be outstanding", then why bother...? You enjoy settling for mediocre stuff...?
hahahaha this dude knows what hes talking about
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
[Killa Sin]

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Post by complexity »

134282 wrote: First, some criticism: Don't ever - EVER - post something (now matter how minute) and preface it by pointing out your flaws before anyone has a chance to read it. If I'm trying to hook up with a girl, I don't start the conversation off by telling her I have a small dick. And if you think it's not the best you can be, then why'd you accept it as it is and post it...? Why not go back and revise and keep working on it until it's the best shit you ever wrote in your entire life...? That's the way you should treat every single piece you write. Every single piece. If it's "not suppose to be outstanding", then why bother...? You enjoy settling for mediocre stuff...?
Nice. You have a cool ability to be able to write the best shit you have ever wrote in your life.
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