The Truth ft. Micz

[complexity]

plex..
Im shakespear ~ dare I paint here ~ what cant i make clear~
um..im the greatest, dont take words out of context, cuz the hatrid~
is less than modest, ill rest my conscience ~ when i die~
cuz death is promised~thats why i dont spend a second~
impressing lawgix, lets address the logic ~ actually lets not~
if we stay obsessing on it ~ we are all fucked ~ take the bets off~
when the text drops ~ labels wont give props ~ society markets~
us all as idiots ~ we are stupid hypocrites ~ its all fuck hip-hop ~
if we aint on that shifty shit ~ that fifty cent~ cuz the shit we spit ~
aint gritty, its that history ~the real truth ~ whats beef without reality~
I spit formality with my ill mentality ~ thats how it will be forever~
we understand cowardly bastards ~ are under mans ~ hourly ~
cleverly we cypher around these ~ lines they draw ~ profoundly ~
technically defined as boundaries ~ which is a flaw~ cuz we flow soundly~
for no applause ~ until we get mass appeal ~ so grab the steele~
we will break through them ~ until cats is real ~without a bad ass deal~

micz..
everything i've mastered, couldnt be without practice
but where da fuck you think my mind would be without rappin
everyday i've been cheatin my casket,and defeatin the pastors
only seems as if rappers, wanna be like the actors
honestly, i cant take it, being a fan demands patience
damn i am debatin, whether to slam the man hatin
society markets to the same place where they cram satan
all the plans, the man's, wasted, and scams we have taken
only plannin for the future that im makin,just wastin my lungs
it feels just like tastin my gums, with the tip of my tongue
with these rhymes, i dont have to show my aggressivness son
impress em wit guns, talk bout things that can mess up their lungs
this rappin is a life savor, society should respect it as one
they only expect it has guns, cursin, everythin it has shun
they dont think back to the days when everythin was about fun
but they just market to the society, but wont accept it as one

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[B-Bear]

complex:

a very interesting rhyme scheme, i'm not sure in which way u planned it to be, although i got a certain idea.. the first part of the words u were sorta sprayin and prayin.. a lot of different meanings and detours around from the title.. worked some places, while in others it seemed confusing..

I spit formality with my ill mentality ~ thats how it will be forever~
we understand cowardly bastards ~ are under mans ~ hourly ~
cleverly we cypher around these ~ lines they draw ~ profoundly ~
technically defined as boundaries ~ which is a flaw~ cuz we flow soundly~
for no applause ~ until we get mass appeal ~ so grab the steele~
we will break through them ~ until cats is real ~without a bad ass deal~

the seoncd part were the best.. vocab's always on point, flow was ill in the part quoted above, it sounded a bit choppy when reading the first part

Micz:

"they dont think back to the days when everythin was about fun
but they just market to the society, but wont accept it as one"

that's some deep shit.. wasn't feelin the rest of it tho.. it were sorta strange sounding more of a poem or a speech then really a rhyme (the first part).. u stepped up a bit, but i'll rate this average.. sorry man, didn't think u played all the strings in this one.. rhyming was too basic, although u had some dope lines.. but keep it up..!! i've read some goood shit from u micz.. know u can rip shit as well!

[RH1NO]

plex-
cleverly we cypher around these ~ lines they draw ~ profoundly ~
technically defined as boundaries ~ which is a flaw~ cuz we flow soundly~
for no applause

^that was dope ..rest of the verse was off and on but pretty solid

micz-
with these rhymes, i dont have to show my aggressivness son
impress em wit guns, talk bout things that can mess up their lungs
this rappin is a life savor, society should respect it as one
they only expect it has guns, cursin, everythin it has shun
they dont think back to the days when everythin was about fun
but they just market to the society, but wont accept it as one

^almost stopped readin yours the first part didnt keep me in it.. then i got ta that part n
it was nice big ups ta both of you pretty solid piece

[complexity]

thanks both of you

"cleverly we cypher around these ~ lines they draw ~ profoundly ~
technically defined as boundaries ~ which is a flaw~ cuz we flow soundly~
for no applause"

that was my favorite bar as well..interesting

[134282]

Great topic...! 'Plex, your first five lines were awesome... Then it seemed like things fell off a bit - the rhyme scheme seemed like it fell apart - and then you tried to pick things back up in the end.

Micz, your rhyme scheme maintained throughout your flow, but it felt awkward - I wonder if it would sound any smoother than it read... Also, you started adding an extra syllable to your multi-syllabic rhymes in the end, which, for me, begins to detract from what you're trying to say.

I enjoyed this piece - glad I found it! - and hope to see more like it from you two.