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i found her broken down to nothing lost in distrought

cought her red handed, pouring blood to the earth for all her "fallen relationships"

after all i always heard "blood is thicker than drunk thoughts..."

i was in the back watching her saw through her wrist with broken dreams

they showed her what a "real woman's appearence" looked like

when she realized she couldn't "fit the frame" she "pictured" a life without scream's

so her scheme was to, stop ringing heavens "church bells" and knock on hells doors...

find lust with the one and only man that can bring her to "death"

kiss his soul with passion and trick him into giving his breath...

see waiting till he rested in peace was out of the question, cause he lockes his bathroom before he leaves to meet his "dream girl"

therefore she couldn't rely on pills, and her father never tought her to use farm equipment... if only he had...

blahhh haha freestyled!!! sorry for any spelling errors...
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Post by SlickMex »

Woah..that was crazy..weird drop?..keep it up..i think?..lol..
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haha...yea... not bad though right?
POET OF THE YEAR 2011
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I'm often soft like cotton but my message is clear, my words hold weight like "dumbos" ears.
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Post by Momeijah »

i Like The Way u Write This Shit Lol. Very Original With The Metaphors And imagery. it's Not The Best Piece i've Seen From u But it Was Pretty Good.

they showed her what a "real woman's appearence" looked like

when she realized she couldn't "fit the frame" she "pictured" a life without scream's

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AKA SCOTCH HALL, MOE MEIJER & MOMEIJAH.
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Post by Borat »

Thank You... Much Appreciated
POET OF THE YEAR 2011
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I'm often soft like cotton but my message is clear, my words hold weight like "dumbos" ears.
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Post by ~*Blitz*~ »

Intresting as hell, I also like the way u write - you have your own style and way of doing things. This definatley was crazy and a good piece even though I personally dont like the content. Good job though, you should drop more often
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Post by Spoof »

wow I liked this one! it's a bit creepy and still very emotional

my fav parts:
i was in the back watching her saw through her wrist with broken dreams

they showed her what a "real woman's appearence" looked like

when she realized she couldn't "fit the frame" she "pictured" a life without scream's

so her scheme was to, stop ringing heavens "church bells" and knock on hells doors...
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~Spoof a.k.a Scaremonger~
"I tell 'em what they don't wanna hear"
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Thank You All for the FEED... grass-e-ass ;)
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