I Try To See The Good Life

T-Stylez · Post by **T-Stylez** » Sun May 20, 2007 7:10 am

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I Try to see the good life
But good things in life are hard to find
I Try to see the good life
But good things in life are hard to find
I Try to see the good life
But good things in life are hard to find
I Try to see the good life

This Shit is All like "Monica Turner" used to be like
Spending alot of time rapping 'n fuckin behind the "mic" (Monica turner was mike(mic) tysons ex)
All that just to see a life thats like great-paradise
Will a good life be rap, or just one straight-surprise
I don't know, I guess the one and Only god could-tell
But right now i try to make "records" that i should-sell
so i "Pick up" my life, Make "Big" attention like "P"
Turn attention into help to find a good life for T
I guess help would be a record deal or just-the-fame
God can u give me a good life cuz i already trust-the-game
And im never a singleplayer, i always try to "play-multi"
So i get my "connection" with rhymes going and i slay-filthy
I'm "In-the-net" of this rap, but i'm no "spider-man"
Shoot the "sticky lines" like a real "dickrider"-damn (Spiderman shoots sticky lines, a dickrider, litterly,also shoots sticky lines... sperm..)
Doing it all in rap, the only current good thing in life
And to see a good life, i made Rap to be my only wife

I Try to see the good life
But good things in life are hard to find
I Try to see the good life
But good things in life are hard to find
I Try to see the good life
But good things in life are hard to find
I Try to see the good life

Sun shines so I walk outside to be in the hot-weather
THe first step i take n it rains, life aint alot-better
I TRY SO HARD!! So god, what the hell is up with misery
My brother deaf, dad hating on me if he knew i was Mc
My sister is a racist, and my mother is the only true-here
People disrespecting me just cuz i rap n rhyme, would you-fear?
But i'm not afraid, i'm angry, how fucked up can people be
And yeah i know i dont give a shit, But i'm just me
All true but if u hate, motherfucker we have the shit-going
U can kill me a billion times but i'll never quit-flowing
Just cuz it could give me a good life, thats what i expect
but i'm not sure now because so far i only lost respect
The only good thing about life is i put my aggression-somewhere
But wit shooting in hip hop i doubt if my obsession-is-fair
Doing it all in rap, the only current good thing in life
And to see a good life, i made Rap to be my only wife

I Try to see the good life
But good things in life are hard to find
I Try to see the good life
But good things in life are hard to find
I Try to see the good life
But good things in life are hard to find
I Try to see the good life

RH1NO · Post by **RH1NO** » Sun May 20, 2007 7:55 am

T-Stylez · Post by **T-Stylez** » Sun May 20, 2007 8:44 am

damnit! i feeded dont take her away verse1 but i cant post up the link cuz im on my psp

RH1NO · Post by **RH1NO** » Sun May 20, 2007 8:47 am

your welcome

T-Stylez · Post by **T-Stylez** » Sun May 20, 2007 9:39 am

thanks. respect

RH1NO · Post by **RH1NO** » Sun May 20, 2007 1:21 pm

5/10

has potential it was pretty basic the hook needed more too
word of advice leave explanations out of the verse cuz it takes
away from the verse if you need to explain do it after
but overall it was ok could feel some emotion in this

sorry wasnt really feelin the spiderman thing

stay active and stay at it

T-Stylez · Post by **T-Stylez** » Sun May 20, 2007 6:40 pm

Cool thanks, and lol, the hook thing is already IN the beat... its not like i'm singing it

the beat is here :
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemus ... dID=145044
itz Hard to Find (Beat)

T-Stylez · Post by **T-Stylez** » Mon May 21, 2007 2:26 am

i now did the second verse in it

~*Blitz*~ · Post by **~*Blitz*~** » Mon May 21, 2007 11:50 pm

definatley needs a new hook, maybe you should pick a new beat without a hook already in it or something.

It was definatley basic, you have potential though which I think I mentioned before - let the people here help you elevate. You also need to write on other topics, seems everything I read from you is all the same just with some diffrent wording - and work on your vocab as well...Keep at it

T-Stylez · Post by **T-Stylez** » Tue May 22, 2007 12:13 am

Cool,

wht makes a rap basic or pro?

~*Blitz*~ · Post by **~*Blitz*~** » Tue May 22, 2007 12:18 am

The vocab you use, how you rhyme the words, the content in your bars and verse, the complexity and creativity you use. If multis are used CORRECTLY (lol) and a bunch of other shit....those are just a few.

If your looking to elevate more you should peep this link

center-of-elevation-vf69.html

Read everything in that section when you get some time, It'll help with elevation - if you have any questions lemme know and I'll be glad to help as much as I can

T-Stylez · Post by **T-Stylez** » Tue May 22, 2007 12:19 am

Do you have msn??

~*Blitz*~ · Post by **~*Blitz*~** » Tue May 22, 2007 12:25 am

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