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RH1NO · Post by **RH1NO** » Wed May 09, 2007 12:43 pm

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insurance? nah i dont have that, tragically im chased fa cash by aflac
takin up handicap spaces in a raggedy ass cadillac
turn up the radio n im blastin static, 100 mph rattlin while im passin traffic
i know shady ass crack addicts.. they dont tell jokes but they got the mack laughin
on my numbers calculations r mathematic, you cant ride wit me n the fact is thats tragic
no ac so the heat got the seats cracked n its got my groin charred
scroungin up change n now im on my way ta cash in at a coinstar
im not hating im proclaiming that my spit should come wit n octane rating
contemplating ways ta keep the block maintaining
cooperating on OPERATION: Stack up more paper than the doc n shady

complexity · Post by **complexity** » Wed May 09, 2007 5:10 pm

Not to bad.

It will be interesting to see where you take this piece.

proclomating

I don't know what the hell word you're trying to use there though.

RH1NO · Post by **RH1NO** » Wed May 09, 2007 9:53 pm

yeah think i may have made up a word there but its all good

B-Bear · Post by **B-Bear** » Wed May 09, 2007 10:22 pm

haha.. yeah, some good potential in this piece.. defintly.. would like to see the rest of it.. jus don't try too hard to make it good, then it'll just be wack

RH1NO · Post by **RH1NO** » Thu May 10, 2007 12:13 am

thanks fellas i never got this much feed on a finished verse..lmao

Ambiguous Realm · Post by **Ambiguous Realm** » Thu May 10, 2007 2:28 am

u'll probably get more if u keep it unfinished, keeps people wondering(i guess..)..n e ways overall it seems like it could be decent if u finish it.. or add more to it atleast

complexity · Post by **complexity** » Thu May 10, 2007 2:51 am

Well. You need to encourage people to check out your drops.

People who drop one nice written every few days tend to get
more feedback than those who drop three random pieces in one day.

B-Bear · Post by **B-Bear** » Thu May 10, 2007 10:43 pm

also giving other artists feed, should encurage them to leave u feed..

RH1NO · Post by **RH1NO** » Thu Jun 07, 2007 10:34 am

updated

|.R.SON.aLL.| · Post by **|.R.SON.aLL.|** » Fri Jun 08, 2007 4:45 am

Not Dissin` But i Thought it Was Wack ..
it Was One Multi Syb. & Most Of it Was Simple as Hell ..
it Would`ve Been Better if U Dug Deeper & actually Think Outside Tha Box ..
Form New Rhyme Patterns also Helps ..
Pretty Basic Though ..
i Think U are Tryin` too Hard at Makin` Everythin` Rhyme ..
Which Shows alot ..
& it Doesn`t Flow Together as Nice ..

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