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yeeah, here we go again..blah blah blah

i turn underground attitude to mainstream ideology
where dreams of success conquers any type of antrhopology
where artists become great gods like greek mythology
and where mercy in an unfamiliar term, no room for apology
it's truth comin thorugh the speakers like wise philosophy
my brain provides redemptional lyrics flowin from my tongue
my longues breathe life extensional material like our sun
it's my game of russian roulett like a verbal battle one on one
my 9mm tongue'll leave ya head with cavity, refill it with reality
and recycle your head cause useless and there's no excuses
cause behaving like a different person explains ya irrelevance
u don't piss excellence, it's in your head like intelligence
act straight like your sexual preference with no intuition
call me a lyrical magician cause i trick u like a corner ho
startin my own recording studio and callin myself a warner bro
name it b-bear's talkshow, we live on the mic and here we talk flow
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first off, link.

i turn underground attitude to mainstream ideology
where dreams of success conquers any type of antrhopology
where artists become great gods like greek mythology
and where mercy in an unfamiliar term, no room for apology

^ that was the best part. Your vocab was pretty good in this. It could have used more multis. Also, the flow was real choppy. Because some times, 2 full bars ended with the same line, and then sometimes it was just one line rhyming with itself. If it was more consitant it would have flowed and worked alot better. Overall it was decent. Work on the consistantcy & multis.

stay up & keep droping
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Here's ya link

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appreciate feedback 8th! i'll look into it..
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uppin..
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40 poeple read the verse, and only 8th left feedback.. impressing!
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