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[align=center]Quick Introduction...

tell me yall aint sick and tired - of bein sick and tired
the poor live unemployed while the rich are gettin hired
status aint gettin' higher - got enemies that beg to see the kid retire
but ima spit this joint, sorry if i disappoint
i'm the PG of my team...so i dare you to diss-the-point
when the team's down, ball's in my hands
Coach even told me in advance:
he said "it's comin' your way, they all testin you"
i see foes comin, i pray. YES - I BLESS MY FOOD.
bad times are nuthin, jus say - u wont let it get to you
and know that God's gonna get you through
my girl used to say "when u reach the top ima stand next to you"
now you could find her on your corner ready yo have sex wit you
her cash used to come in 3 ways, so why's it only 2D though?
ima welcoming myself to illestlyrics.com, its truly yours...

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drop a link, and ill be glad to leave some feed.
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Post by Momeijah »

Pretty Coo Drop. Flow And Multis Are What Stood Out For Me The Most.

status aint gettin\' higher - got enemies that beg to see the kid retire
but ima spit this joint, sorry if i disappoint
i\'m the PG of my team...so i dare you to diss-the-point
when the team\'s down, ball\'s in my hands
Coach even told me in advance:
he said \"it\'s comin\' your way, they all testin you\"

^That Shit Just Tied Together Dope lol, Wording All in The Right Places, Coo Wordplay And Shit, a Few More Quotables in There And The Multis Weren\'t Forced at All. Keep Droppin.
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AKA SCOTCH HALL, MOE MEIJER & MOMEIJAH.
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Post by 16 Micz »

my girl used to say "when u reach the top ima stand next to you"
now you could find her on your corner ready yo have sex wit you



not bad i liked that line the most..you had a nice flow with this one..im sure it'll sound better on audio rather than text, but either way it was a solid drop..keep it up..and welcome to the site
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Word thanks for the feed, and the welcome
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Post by Mac »

Word, The Beginning Was Dope. But The Line Micz Mentioned Up North Was Fire, Sick Metaphore. Welcome To The Site Homie, Be Easy.

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Good lookin' Mac...
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Post by RH1NO »

flow wordayplay multis all solid nice drop stay active
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Thanks for the looks..
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Post by MesaR »

This Drop Was Gold I Liked It Alot First Bar Was Alright

my girl used to say "when u reach the top ima stand next to you"
now you could find her on your corner ready yo have sex wit you

That Stood Out For Me..

Keep Dropping And What Not Be Easy..
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..Fuck that gay shit you say on a beat..
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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

lol feedback from these guys is crap... i'll be nice about the feedback since ur new here n i dont wanna scare u off lol...overall i thought it was pretty simple.. multis were ok.. doesn't seem like ur strong point.. im not really sure if u have a strong point actually.. i wouldn't put u in the same category as these rookies tho.. maybe after i see a few more of ur drops.. this seemed like it was freestyled or somethin...main thing i can say about ur piece is that atleast u made sense
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