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I Stand Here Vol.5(Realize Words)

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16 Micz
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I Stand Here Vol.5(Realize Words)

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how could i ever forget the days i spent hoping to write as good as you
knowing that i wouldnt do, the things that i shouldnt do
we all know these guys wouldnt shoot, but somehow the lies were foolin you
these guys i despised will suffer for the lies they put in you
i couldnt claim to flow sick, or even compare to those kids
but you still let me know its,a possible dream as long as i hold it
lets just continue to claim the talent, and eat the words
somehow i could defeat the herbs, but never beat the worse
but now as i would read the verse, and cheat the curse
let the heat disperse, maybe i should have just repeat diverse
maybe leave the words, so i wouldnt have to claim to be the worse
but as you see the words, verbs, and herbs, and it defeats the purpose
maybe if we were to see the earth spin, realize the dreams that words give
and let it seem as if your mentally screamin the words just
to see your worthless, realize that your self-esteem is hurtin
and everyone on your team is laughin, it seems that rappin
can be your casket, or maybe bring your assests to beam to masses
picturing all the screamin and clappin, lights bleamin as practiced
just got a few words and a mic, and we've all seen them actin

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Post by Mac »

No Offense, But I Think This Piece Is Wack. I've Seen Better Shit From You. Looked Like You Was Trying To Change Your Format Of Writing. But Word That's My 2 Cents, Keep Droppin.

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Post by -SoahKGniK- »

Yea dog i agree with mac...iv seen better from u
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Post by 16 Micz »

r u kidding, maybe this shit flew over your lil heads..lol but its all good, preciate the feedback..UPPIN
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Post by complexity »

this had a nice flow and could easily be related to, it had good structure and was organized, a few metaphors, pretty nice content

Wasn't the best "i stand here" but probably the top two.

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