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Just a lil somethin i continued from earlier.. appreciate feed..

consider me the modern moses writin my laws on slates
laws known as lyrics always provoking and teaching hate
jaws bite in hysterics like they're lookin for a head to rip off
it just ignite my lyrics and the written eager inside me
that provide me with desire to rewrite lines of history
what if was hitler was gandhi and my mom the mona lisa?
what if my dick was bigger then the leaning tower of pisa?
would ladies still admire it and say that's a piece of art?
or would they cut it off, leave my to bleed or stab my heart?
so many questions with unsolved answers burnin raw like cancer
doesn't exactly kill, but have a record longer then the bible
makes me sit down and call out for the disciples of hip hop
write a magical formula on the wall and make this shit stop
cause hip hop is reenterin the race after a quick pit stop
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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

"leave a link" lol
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Post by drunken jesus »

[8th on a hillbilly powertrip]you need a link[/8th on a hillbilly powertrip]
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
[Killa Sin]

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Post by B-Bear »

oh shit! im soo sorry...lol.. fuckin tired of that rule..lol

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Uppin for feedback
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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

wow dude your off wit your rhyme scheme somewhere, cuz its so hard for me to get thru your verses, your rhymes arent equal, and honestly your lines sometimes do not make sense, well not perfectly at least, no hate, jus statin my opinion..
i'll smack yuh with rage i force multis outta my ass to the page
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Post by B-Bear »

it aint really that hard.. lol... but anyway, i'll change it a bit till next verse.. thanks for feedback
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Post by Mac »

Agreed w/Ghost. It Was Weak Honestly. Good Topic Though It Would Of Been Sick If You Handled It Better As Far As Flow Is Concerned. But Word, Keep Dropping.

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