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Post by drunken jesus »

i sit alone in my four cornered room,
staring at cameras ready to go bananas

raw live tv its all eyes on me suprised i'd be hyped to be nice and clean
righteous so let me write just the life i lead while the bright lights on me
i'm a drunk slut, nympho, fuck up, skitzo, slash insomniac addicted
to money cars and cash sneakers any diva seen with the bombest ass
reefer and speakers, producing & writing making moves with the titans
tweaking with rap stars over who's grooves the nicest dude who uses midas
touch writing stuff then lights a dutch and makes musical masterpieces
smoothest of rap releases but the procedings ain't the newest of acts believe its
been years in the making to the path of jesus so now its here for the taking
be stupid just view it as music a miracle fading while the cameras on
behind the scenes the life i lead ain't too nice to me the bullshit marathon
that carrys on, hundred thousandaire but an embarrassment to my family yet
they just waiting to get my reality check my girl still giving me malice & stress
with a look in her eye like, i wouldn't be worth shit if i couldn't balance her checks
i can't be down & depressed bringing a kid into this worlds a challenging test
being a dude with flow living a real life truman show where every movements shown
no choice or hope just a rich boy thats broke this is my life enjoy the show

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Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
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Post by LadySam »

wow 15 views no comments? haha
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with a look in her eye like, i wouldn't be worth shit if i couldn't balance her checks
i can't be down & depressed bringing a kid into this worlds a challenging test
being a dude with flow living a real life truman show where every movements shown
no choice or hope just a rich boy thats broke this is my life enjoy the show

obviously i liked the ending the most. probably coz it was the only part i really understood. i rarely see you drop, maybe u should do it more?
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Post by complexity »

The last part was the easiest to relate to but I thought you did a real good job with this short piece.

touch writing stuff then lights a dutch and makes musical masterpieces
smoothest of rap releases but the procedings ain't the newest of acts believe its
been years in the making to the path of jesus so now its here for the taking
be stupid just view it as music a miracle fading while the cameras on
behind the scenes the life i lead ain't too nice to me the bullshit marathon

Crayyyz shit
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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

this shit was off the hook DJ, i didnt really find the beginnin to hard to follow, som parts were harder than others, but yo homie!!!! that shit was fire, killin the multies and mad usage of vocab. you should mos def keep droppin man.

big ups to the endin to it was Grade A lyrics
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Post by Viral »

niiiice....multis were tight as usual.....i guess the complexity of ur piece is really there like u said ud try for it to be...lol not sure if only i caught that...hhahaha...dope verse for sure.....keep em comin
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Post by Street Pharmacist »

lol i likedd this lil peacee,it was solid



lines VVV

raw live tv its all eyes on me suprised i'd be hyped to be nice and clean
righteous so let me write just the life i lead while the bright lights on me
i'm a drunk slut, nympho, fuck up, skitzo, slash insomniac addicted
to money cars and cash sneakers any diva seen with the bombest ass
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Post by drunken jesus »

good looking out for the feedback, i'll return the favor to ya'll shortly

and to further clarify the topic, its metaphorical and literal using the metaphor of a real life reality show like the truman show movie to describe the feeling of all eyes on me in the spotlight, critcized for everything i do etc.
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
[Killa Sin]

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Post by RH1NO »

nice drop dj you have a great way of tellin a story n it leavin a mental picture thats what its about
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Post by drunken jesus »

good looking out

upping over the bullshit
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
[Killa Sin]

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Post by ~*Blitz*~ »

woooooooooow, that was crazy and cool as fuck

The end was killer with the kid thing, nice multis nice vocab nice everything - you should write more shit like this more often. You said so much in such a short verse. Im impressed...kicking ass and taking names
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Post by drunken jesus »

3 diff. people with 3 diff. sets of 4 bars that are their favorite, in a 17 bar piece

guess i'm doing something right
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
[Killa Sin]

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Post by Mac »

Solid Piece Man, The Beginning Seemed Like You Was Just Warming Up But When You Did You Killed It An The Ending Just Added Fuel To The Fire Man Dope Shit. Keep Dropping.
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