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RH1NO
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another bored drop

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steal ya floormat to prove your my door mat
you were born wack n ill wipe my feet on your forum rap
stay back cuz ya games wack i deal in lbs. ya slang sacks
flatten ya quarters like they layin on train tracks
maintain to attack ya lame act like the mainfram stay hacked

goin way back like playdough n crayola ill take that

brought ya bagged lunch to the playground i ate that

coolest cat on the school bus sat way back

drive by's on knight rider big wheels n spray mack's

leave you layin flat takin naps... you a t-ball stand n i wave bats
TALK is BIG thats why i stayed in CAPS but i can back it up n wont take it back
push weight like im slayin fat n pipes is clogged but im drainin rap
pussy aint tight i just play in back 28's on the chevy n the frame is jacked
shit or get off the pot cuz the clay is cracked take what i want n you raped on tracks
like the shows over make you fade to black..
stab you wit a sharpie n leave you wit fake tats..
your caught in my current the waves slap n your wake lacks
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Post by ~*Blitz*~ »

This was nice, you're getting better. Rhyming was alright....you do have some random ass shit lol. Keep dropping its fun to read your stuff
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Post by MesaR »

i thought this was abit choppy when you rhyme not all words acutally are correct rhyming it was alright for a little peice i can tell that you were bored lol but i do see some improvement props
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..Fuck that gay shit you say on a beat..
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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

this was aight man, mos definitely like the beginnin more than the last couple bars though, it was pretty kool, pretty basic rhyme scheme though, but for what it was it was a decent drop man, keep elevatin.....
i'll smack yuh with rage i force multis outta my ass to the page
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appreciate all the feed i try tend ta spark off the wall shit when im bored
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